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 Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:14 pm
Onyxavia's Help Thread Have a picture you simply can't quite figure out what's wrong with it? Have a WIP you need some help with before you begin finishing it? You're in the right place! Post your pictures here and get critiqued. you can read on below to find out who I am, what I do, what you'll get and just some basic rules about critiques. Enjoy!.Index oo1. Intro Post (You are Here)
oo2. Who is Onyxavia? Credentials.
oo3. Some Samples of my Artwork.
oo4. How I Critique
oo5. Some Rules
oo6. Some Tutorials I've Made
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:20 pm
Who Is Onyxavia? Wow I look young here. If only *sigh* I offer a wee bit of expertise for my age and, while credentials never mean you'll definitely get a wonderful critique from someone, it always helps. I by no means am the best person to come to, but I hopefully can offer some insight.
Credentials
[+] I'm 17. I can relate to many of you here.
[+] I am a Studio Art and Education major. I have good knowledge of processes equipped with study of how to help you learn and achieve your goals.
[+] I am a Caricature Artist for Kaman's Art Shoppes. I sell my artwork for a living and am employed by a company that allows me to do so.
[+] I freelance on the side. I have learned and adapted to a target audience to make sure my work sells.
Find Me on the Web
[+] MEiken @ DeviantArt
[+] MEiken @ ArtWanted
[+] MEiken @ SheezyArt
[+] AttemptedBeauty @ Xanga
[+] Onyxavia @ MySpace
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:21 pm
Some Samples of my Artwork This is an up-to-date post of five of my pieces, so you can see what I can do. You are fully welcome to critique these.
 This kid was awesome. I drew him at my work - the picture beside him is my art. We're required to be fast, but I think I spent about 20 minutes on him. Kind of went over my allowed time. Ah well. Prismacolor, ink, 12x16".  As always, I find a way to stylize even my most realistic pieces. Some proportional issues, I know. Prismacolor, 18x24".  One of my more emotional pieces. Watercolor, 18x24".  Still life done during my ART 110 class in one sitting. Graphite, 18x24".  Finally, something Anime. Watercolor, ink.
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:24 pm
My Critiquing
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[b]What I See that is Well Done:[/b]
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:25 pm
Some Rules [+] Be accepting and understanding. While you may not agree with what I say, please don't try to argue. It is, after all, opinion anyway, and by coming here, you accept that I will give you my opinion of your artwork.
[+] Others may critique pictures here too, but I assume that's what the rest of this guild is for =P
[+] Try to avoid posting several pictures when you ask for a critique unless you're asking if you've improved or where to go next.
[+] On that note, you don't have to be posting for a simple critique. You can ask for help on a WIP, advice of majors from works you enjoy to do, or anything else you can think of.
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:26 pm
Some Helpful Tutorials Hands Here's a hand tutorial I made for someone in the Gaian Hospital. You might find of use.
*Note, you might want to make the palms a bit longer than they're drawn here, are try narrowing the hand a bit. It's been a while since I made this.
 1. The best way to begin with hands is to practice from your own. Draw what you see. But if you cant' get that down, try transforming the hand into geometric shapes - rectangles and such. Here's a beginning sketch.  2. For the fingers, begin with a ball-and-stick sketch. I should have probably put balls at the joints in the fingers as well, but you'll see them when I get to the geometric phase. Also, though my fingers are very ridig in this, fingers can bend at the joints. Remember that. Also judge where your finger tips and joints are in relation to another finger. you can see how I've judged the tips of the fingers with a light line above and where I've judged other joints and such with lines in below pictures.  3. Here's the geometric shapes sketched out. Notice how I end each shape at a joint. I'll give you a clearer view of geometric fingers in the next example.  4. Notice how these fingers bend at their joints. Also notice there's no details yet.  5. Here I've erased the dark geometric lines and sketched over them some more fluid, connected lines. No details yet again.  6. Finally, add a few details. <3
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Posted: Tue Jun 06, 2006 3:28 pm
Sample Critique Onyxavia amakakeru okay, I think your intention behind this thread is really great, and it's a pity no one has posted their art to be critiqued yet, so I'll go first. 3nodding  This is a sketch and work in progress. I am currently working on the lineart, so it's still possible for me to make major changes to the picture. smile and since it's a sketch I don't need a critique on the neat-ness of the lines (although I think I may need to work on that - I do hope you can see what I'm trying to draw here. sweatdrop ). Thank you in advance.
Thank you for your kind words! Now onto critiquing.
Initial Comments: The sketchiness of the lines actually doesn't bother me, since I do quite a bit of pencil work myself. I like it; it's very cute, and I can't wait to see the line art. I assume the lined paper will be taken out?
What I See that is Well Done:
[+] The wolf, proportions and expression, is incredibly well mastered.
[+] Mood and tone has been set well. Kudos!
[+] Proportions over all are well done - This one's rather hard for many to achieve, so again, kudos.
What I See that could Use Improvement:
[+] The girl seems a little stiff, for whatever reason, especially around the waist area. Giving her a little more depth (a slight view of her rear =P) would show that she's sitting on the wolf instead of straddling it stiffly. I'd also suggest giving her a slight bend at the knee. Her fingers also get lost atop the wolf's head, but I assume that will come out with lineart.
[+] The wolf's hind foot disappears behind the girl's foot. I forget simple things like this all the time stressed EDIT Now that I look at it again, I can see the foot, but I feel it should be a bit more visable. Again this may simple as needing to ink it. Once I see the line art, it would be much more apparent to me, but by then, it's too late =P Whatever you decide to take from this will probably look just fine.
Something to Work on for Next Time:
[+] Try working on something other than lined paper. It'll save you a great deal of time and your sketches will come out clean and crisp.
Final Comments: Just take care of a few stiffness and simple issues and you'll be well on your way! I can't wait to see this finished.
Overall Grade Well done. 8/10
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Posted: Sat Jun 17, 2006 12:51 pm
I love the tutorial for the hands. It's very helpful sice this is my most difficult thing to draw. I appreciate how you broke it down to shapes. Your rendition is actually is better than all the art books I've looked at.
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