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“Face me demon!” Kelth yelled out through the rain. He ran through the storm, lightning flashing occasionally lighting up the night. The mud was slick beneath his feet, the once hard ground turned to mud from the relentless rain. The young warrior ran forward blindly, through the forest. He wanted only one thing: Revenge.
The young man ran through the scenes over and over in his head, his burning village and the telltale of a demon’s claw on the villagers. As he continued down the trail, his thoughts completely absorbed in the painful memory, he hardly noticed the ground starting to shift beneath his feet. As the ground gave way beneath him, he was plunged into darkness, his last thoughts were those that his family and friends could not be avenged.

Kelth stirred on the hard ground, and he heard a deep, rumbling voice say “So, you awake manling? Good, I was worried you wouldn’t, then I couldn’t have my fun with you.” The young warrior bolted up at that last bit, and pulled his sword out of its sheath –only to find it wasn’t there. “Where’s my sword demon? Where did you hide it?” Kelth’s face was a grimace of anger and pure hatred at towards the monster. The demon stepped out of the shadows and it’ dog-like face leered out at him. “But that would take the fun out of the whole thing now wouldn’t it? Oh, wait, I recognize your scent, yes… you’re from that village I destroyed last night aren’t you? Well, I guess I’ll have to give you some way to die with honor.” The demon waved his black hand, and out of thin air, Kelth’s sword appeared back in it’s sheath. “You shouldn’t have done that demon-spawn! With this sword I shall carve out your evil heart and burn it over a fire!” He yelled out, his voice filled with rage. The demon started to laugh, his evil voice filling the dark cave with haunting echoes “You will kill me! I destroyed you entire village with less then a thought! And you believe that you will defeat me? Fine, come face your doom, for I shall show you such agony that you will beg on your knees for death! Now, warrior, you will die!” the vicious demon bared his teeth, and leapt at the lone warrior, thinking to bring him to a swift death. Kelth saw the demon bounding towards him, and he raised his sword in defence.

Kelth sat on the corpse of his foe, the demon, naked and bloodied sword in hand. The last words of his now dead enemy haunting him. “So, I die, but answer me, will that bring back your loved ones?” It still angered Kelth, to look on the demon’s face, for he wore a smile, the same cruel one that he wore when he talked of killing the young warrior’s kinsmen. No, thought Kelth, it won’t. But I can try to kill every one of your foul kin until I die, until I am reunited with my village once more. They were with me when I came into this world, and so they will wait for me in the next. He walked out of the cave, wondering if maybe the peace of death would have been better.

Ya, that was the problem I had too... He's too much the typical 'dark-brooding hero-type'. It's kinda obnoxious. I think I'd need to add in a couple of side characters to make it work. As for the demon, I wanted to keep it short. That's why I didn't really give Kelth an appearence either (and, on a plus side, if I do continue, it'll let me have more fun designing him).

Of course I do! I post to get critisiscm, I don't know any other way to improve.

I like it! I had no idea you liked to write!