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Alexxx the Medic!

PostPosted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 9:26 am


Times are looking up, kid
The martyrs have placed the winning bid
A disaster once noted has fallen underfoot
To guard my feet from hearts ashes and soot

Times are looking up, child
Finally changing the face of a love so wild
A decision leads to a career; a lie to a grave
Its the road to the courtyard which I pave

Times are looking up, boy
Once indifferent sadness now scattered and annoyed
A timeless passion forgotten and ignored
Covering over the smiles that soared

Times are looking up, ghost
Of these happy times Ill gladly boast
Your nightmares of fire and funeral scenes
Wont shake my roots in a new life theme

Times are looking up, falcon
It seems fate is up for auction
At the tip of their tongues is salvation
Waiting for that fools word of desecration

Times are looking up, hollow man
How long you vied for the promised land
You longed for a holy being to perceive
Your light was inside yourself, as long as youd believe.

Minutes become years; years become millennia
Emotions dart in and out as visions of decennia
Is your life as valid as the liquid in your cup?
Oh, the misery when times are looking up.
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thanks guys/girls.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 18, 2006 10:33 pm


I've got the good part of nothing for you. It's good stuff. What else do you have posted?

Archknight of the Dance


Alexxx the Medic!

PostPosted: Sat Aug 05, 2006 7:03 am


I don't have anything else posted on here yet. I was going to check the response in here before I posted them like crazy, but I'll post a few more someplace if you'd like to read more.
PostPosted: Mon Aug 07, 2006 12:11 pm


pretty good but HUH?

Im 2 sexy for dis SN

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