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KingOfRats

PostPosted: Tue Jul 18, 2006 5:58 pm


I came to conciseness. My eyes were closed. As my hearing came back, i could make out the sound of dripping water hit metal. My wrists burned as the wet rope that bound them together rubbed up against them. My heart beat so fast, I could barely breath. I lifted my head, and opened my eyes. I was in a dark, glumly flooded basement. There were cardboard boxes with red wet stains... There were scattered assortments of tools the likes of which I've never seen. There were two dogs in symmetrical cages next to a wall. The only sound coming from that area were the flies that flew in and out of the dogs. Through the extremely dirty window near the top left corner of this rather Large basement, I could see the flickering of lightning. It must be storming... I could feel the bruised areas of my head, where I had been dragged by my hair. I looked around and found a man tied to a chair similar to what I was sitting on. We locked eyes, but before I could say anything, the basement door opened. We could both hear the breathing. Then, A booming footstep hitting the top stair. I couldn't see the person, it was too dark on that side of the room. Another footstep rang through the basement and I jumped. The next was accompanied by a crash of lightning. My heart beat so hard I could barely hear the next five foot steps over the beating.

At first, I though it was a man, but it couldn't have been. No man was that skinny... That tall. the pail gray skin barely stretched over his skull. He almost had to duck as he slowly walked towards my fellow prisioner.He stopped, and his glowing green eyes pierced through the dark, gazed into mine. I felt a jolt of pain seer through my body. It's old redneck, farmer clothing were ripped in many places. It began to walk towards the man again. It stopped at a table and picked up several tools that is tucked into it's belt. Then it slowly reached it's bony hand towards the man. As the hand got closer and closer to him, He began to panic and scream louder and louder. Then It grabbed onto his face, and pulled the his whole body(Including the chair) to it. It took out Toe nail clippers and pulled on the man's eye lids. I closed my eyes, but I couldn't drown out the screaming. For what ever It seemed like, I kept my eyes closed. Hearing a constant mixture of screaming, crunching, and slashing. when It seemed as though the torture had stopped, I opened my eyes...

The man was to tired now to even scream. He slowly turned his head to look at me. I couldn't look away now. Blood ran down his eyes where the lids used to be. Pieces of scalp were missing. His entire chest was skinned revealing the lunges surrounded by several broken ribs. The skin on his legs was pulled open, and chunks of meat were pulled from the incisions. The man tried to say something, but then his head fell. I just gazed upon the corpse of what used to be a living person.

I heard the sound of flesh being eaten and torn at. I looked to my right, to see the tall man bent over eating something. It paused and turned to look at me. it's mouth was covered in blood. It threw what ever it was holding to it's side, stood up, and approached me. I was too scared to scream. It's long bony fingers gently ran down my face. I closed my eyes. As I could feel him pulling out my innards, I slowly drifted to sleep.

The End
PostPosted: Tue Jul 18, 2006 6:37 pm


dark and twisted welcome back rat

mij0189


KingOfRats

PostPosted: Sat Aug 05, 2006 7:42 pm


Thanks man, great to be back. twisted
PostPosted: Sun Aug 06, 2006 4:27 pm


I can see you're getting better. There wasn't as many errors as there were in your last two. This was actually a story I could also read without thinking pessimistic about it. It wasn't repetive like the Rat story, and it wasn't too cliche. You're impoving slowly as you go along. Heh, just try checking over your work to catch some typos or grammatical errors.

Everything Zen
Crew


KingOfRats

PostPosted: Sun Aug 06, 2006 5:59 pm


Um, I made this one before the last one you read. It's been hear longer. Yea, you just diddn't notice it before.
PostPosted: Mon Aug 14, 2006 4:44 pm


its awesome

oldyrocker


KingOfRats

PostPosted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 9:30 pm


Thank you very much friend
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