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 Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 10:57 am
please comment, id love to know what everyone thinks
A DARK WORLD HERO
Hate shall consume you,
Emotions will spark.
Conscience is lost
Without truth in the dark.
Tears can be greedy,
Have cruelness beyond
. Secrets revealing
This heart stabbing song.
Love can be painful,
The thoughts die away.
Hearts can be broken,
The tears never fade.
Delicate minds soon
Create a large hole.
With beings of hatred
Consuming your soul.
Will I keep dying?
Will I ever wake?
Is there a point in?
The breaths that I take?
My minds suffocating,
The thoughts in my head.
Will they come find me
And pronounce me dead?
All of those years of
Relieving this stress.
Hatred is winning!
It's fighting its best.
All of those thoughts,
They’re rolling downhill.
Its presence has power,
It's yearning to kill!
So don't just retreat,
You have to fight too.
Your power's not weary,
There’s still faith in you!
Your existence has purpose,
You must follow the plan.
So you can restore the salvation of man!
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 10:58 am
Round about
Is the world connected?,
Or is that just a myth?.
Are you truly truthful?,
Or do you plead with faith?.
What are our lives meant for?,
To cry and shout and storm?.
Do we speak with writer’s hand?,
Or write with writers form?.
Do you see the meaning?,
Or is your heart's soul blind?.
Will you keep your secret?,
Or share your piece of mind?.
Can you see the world's depth?,
Or are you on the ground?.
Do you see my feelings?.
For we are all around.
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 8:59 am
Pretty! They're so much better than mine... sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 9:17 am
I write a bunch of Yaoi sutff, I doubt you guys would like that sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Jul 25, 2006 7:30 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 2:20 pm
I only read the first poem, and I thought it was pretty good. I think you should rethink the way you use punctuation, I felt like you put it in places it was not needed. 4laugh
@Aly: Yaoi is like guyXguy stories.
@Ghost: I wouldn't mind reading it... ninja
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Posted: Sat Jul 29, 2006 1:27 pm
Lolli~Funk I only read the first poem, and I thought it was pretty good. I think you should rethink the way you use punctuation, I felt like you put it in places it was not needed. 4laugh thanx for the advice ^^ and i`m seconding the yaoi! ^^ i`d love to read it
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Posted: Sun Jul 30, 2006 6:42 am
That is GOOd.
But for some reason it's a little confusing to try to read.. maybe if it had spaces between sets of rhyming lines...
(forget what they are called.. LOL!
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Posted: Sun Aug 06, 2006 3:00 pm
it means gay. any kind of gay content; such as mangas that has a story about two guys having a romance SPARK between them. 'yaoi' is japanese by the way. razz
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Posted: Sun Aug 06, 2006 3:01 pm
I love your poem. I only read the first one and halfway through the second one, but I love it. it's so dark and gives off feeling. haha.
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Posted: Sun Aug 13, 2006 6:04 am
Ghost-Love I write a bunch of Yaoi sutff, I doubt you guys would like that sweatdrop I write yaoi too... and this poem was good, very inspireing smile
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