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You'd rate these as...
keep trying
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I liked the 1st one, but the second one needs work
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I liked the 2nd one, but the first one needss work
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just stop right now while you still have a shred of dignity
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they were both pretty good
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Awesome! are there any more?
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Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 7:51 pm


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Forever More
As I look across the horizon a vision popped into my thoughts
It cut across smooth like a skater on ice
A hand touched my neck
His touch gave warm shots
And I looked up to see Wrice
He leaned down and on my cheek gave me a peck
And in my ear her whispered so only I could hear
The love he felt for me when I was near
And even though when ever I see him I?m engulfed in fear
He?ll be there for me to dry up every tear

Fallen Angle
I fall,
plundering down to earth.
Mist swirls into my vision,
and I remember my birth...

Born into heaven,
never knowing what it's like to live.
With never ending dreams.
What would I give...
to know what life means?

Now I'll never know
because now I fall
down into clouds of snow
and I hear the last call,
the call of love,
from so far above.

The though struck me so pure and true,
the meaning of life is to love.
I remember his coo,
and my wings appear ready for flight.
I ascend,
ready to make amends.
With all my might,
I fly back to the above.
PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2005 8:16 pm


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Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 9:36 am


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PostPosted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 12:18 pm


wow.. me likie art work.... o and The poems are good... just alittle more detail might really pull more but I' am not the best so I might just be crazy.

Krellxxt


Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 6:26 pm


thanks for the tip!
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Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Sun May 01, 2005 8:38 am


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Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Sun May 08, 2005 12:15 pm


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PostPosted: Mon May 09, 2005 9:05 pm


I really love the second one! It's beautiful and strikes a very emotive note, in me anyways.

Erm...yes, I'm not very good at reviewing other peoples' work, forgive me.

nicole_dulany


Queen.Trickster

PostPosted: Sat May 14, 2005 4:02 pm


I don't care! any complement I can get I take! xd
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Merenwen99
Crew

PostPosted: Sat May 14, 2005 8:39 pm


I love the second one. It's totally awesome. I don't know what it is about the first one. . . I just don't like it as much. Obviously however, you're good and I'd love to see more of your work. Just a question, what are the images for?
PostPosted: Sun May 15, 2005 3:56 pm


eh, the first one wasn't that good any ways. and the pics are for fun blaugh

Queen.Trickster


Vince Sagara

PostPosted: Wed May 18, 2005 7:41 pm


I'd have to say good job on the second poem, it is better than the first. More details can be nice but they can also spoil a good work. Also, I love the pics!!!! Post more please.
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