Hello All.
I am going to start off the post with a poem I wrote today in PE. Critisism is accepted, but it MUST BE CONSTRUCTIVE...please?
Ok...
Name of work: O Ye
Author: NeevilWeevil.
Oh ye with hair like the sun
can you see what you've done?
you cannot see past her face
to the girl you loved before
Oh ye with eyes blue as the sky
can't you see me cry?
and as we still correspond
you cannot forget her smile
oh ye with smile of loving eyes
cannot see the destruction
you cannot see the pain that's left
left deep down inside
Oh ye, the love of many years
can't see my pain that burns
and as you're laughing with her
I sit here. Sad. Alone.
The next poem is from the Sanctuary....That means Jay and Tad have read it already.
Title of Work: Falling
Author: NeevilWeevil
Spiraling downwards into dispair
The prison that is my mind
The key- a shining star
Unreachable by my body and soul
This life is filled with darkness
Addiction to dark- to night- to fear
Addiction to the ragged breathing
that tears my soul into two black halves
This life is filled with anguish
ragged cries escape my mouth
the cries of an animal meeting it's demise
the cries of my tourtured soul.
My heart is addicted to pain.
my mind creates a prison,
an unbreakable vice,
of a pain i cannnot escape.
the pain that i try to distract myself from,
i push my palms into the broken glass
I watch as my blood drips to the floor
and wonder where this all began
I was an honor student once,
One day before the darkness began
then one day- i lost it
my grip on life was wrenched from my grasp
And ever since, i have been like this
a broken-down wreck of a human bieng
my parents do not own me anymore
I doubt that anyone could reconize me now
I once had a life- filled with light and happiness
A life of promise- i life i could be proud of
But now i am ashamed of what i see
the face that's looking back- is not mine anymore
Addicted to pain, my heart aches silently
As i cry into the night- my sobs reach deaf ears
The ears of the world, closed to those in pain
My life- in darkness...for ever
Depressing? you bet.
Next poem is one i wrote....say about three years ago?
As she looked into his eyes,
She could have sworn there was something,
To show her that he knew more than she thought
But then, like lightning streaking across the sky,
It was gone, done as if it had never been
She brushed back his long hair,
Tamed the lock that was falling into his eyes,
She sighed and wondered, what would happen,
To this proud and beautiful being
That stood, majestically watching her every move.
She cleaned and replaced his surrounds
Making sure everything was perfectly finished
And then, she stood realizing that this would be the last time
She would ever have to do these things.
Feeling tears building in her eyes,
She ran, bolted just as fast as he could and was gone, lost into the sunset
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