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Akasha31993

PostPosted: Fri Aug 04, 2006 4:47 pm


Love No More
Love?
Ha!
Never again
Lust?
Surely
Even if its a sin
That one?
Sure
I like the looks of him
Together forever?
Not now
Not ever
I will not give in
To love once again
PostPosted: Fri Aug 04, 2006 4:56 pm


Internal Conversations
I hate him
You love him
You feel below him
I'm far above him
You want to be his
To forget what hate is
I don't care what you think!
You're not real after all!
Yet you've done nothing but hurt me!
And help my downfall!
Why?
We wouldn't hurt you my dear
Why would we hurt our maker
when her end is so near?

We are not cruel creatures
Not naturaly bad

There are parties to go to and men to be had
Shut up lust!
Shut up fate!
I will do as I please
Believe in nothing but hate
Hate
It is silly

The one truly dumb thing
Calm down cuz you'll always

Be controlled by something

Akasha31993


Akasha31993

PostPosted: Fri Aug 04, 2006 5:00 pm


Please use a 1/10 format to rate it and tell me if there are any problems you see....
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