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H u g D r u g
Crew

PostPosted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 8:26 am


This is a poem I wrote not to long ago... Its kinda long so bear with me.
(Three pages of loose-leaf XD)

"Please just once."
He said to me.
"I don't know,
I like another guy
you see."
"Oh, come on,
I don't bite.
I'll take you out once,
7 o'clock tonight."
I sighed giving in,
nodding my head.
"Okay fine."
That's all I said.

Home, that night,
I watched the closck.
It's sound brought me nearer.
Tick, Tock.
The doorbell rang.
It was him.
I opened the door,
eyes ever so slim.
"Lets get this over with."
I said with a sigh.
Don't get me wrong,
he's a great guy.

To his car,
he opened the door.
I got in,
feet touching the floor.
He drove not going far.
Getting out,
He opened my door to his car.
I sighed,
looking around.
A resturaunt called,
'Lost and Found'
Coming in,
oh what a treat.
A man escorted us,
to a terrific seat.
I ordered a steak.
He one too.
Along with a drink.
A soda, well two.

We ate our food,
He looked me in the eyes.
A gazing stare,
took me by suprise.
"I've watched you from afar."
He said feeling shy.
"I just couldn't stand.
You being with another guy."

Looking to my reflection,
I relized I had blushed.
It seemed to me,
The resturaunt had hushed.
An irregular silence
as he spoke.
Revileing things,
hard to provoke.

We stood up together,
got into his car.
Not a word,
from either so far.
Arriving at my house,
walking to my door.
I took him ny the hands,
never feeling like this before.
I wrapped my arms,
around his neck.
Everything that mattered,
was a tiny speck.
We gazed for a moment.
I kissed him so.
He loved me, I loved him.
This Much is to know.


Wow... that took awhile. Tell me what you think.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 9:50 am


:Shock: Wow! Very pretty! Amazing, I loved it, other than a few typos, I can find nothing wrong with it, wonderful job!

Harra_Wizen
Captain


H u g D r u g
Crew

PostPosted: Wed Aug 09, 2006 5:32 pm


Thanks, Harra ^.^ It didn't take me long to write it. Its about an expirience my friend had.... but the guy was a complete hunk... XD
PostPosted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 1:04 pm


Hahaha, either way, it was very nice! (Why is it I am the only one who seems to not care if guys are 'hunks' or not?)

Harra_Wizen
Captain


H u g D r u g
Crew

PostPosted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 2:44 pm


[Hehe, lol. I don't normally care but it does matter sometimes....]
PostPosted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 3:11 pm


Heh. Very good. I liked it ^.^

Sanguarian Penguin
Crew


Harra_Wizen
Captain

PostPosted: Thu Aug 10, 2006 3:32 pm


Agreed! ^_^ Very well done! ^_^
PostPosted: Sun Aug 13, 2006 11:06 am


LOVE IT!

Kala-El


H u g D r u g
Crew

PostPosted: Wed Aug 16, 2006 9:22 am


Thanks.... It was fun to write ^.^
PostPosted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 10:36 am


wow, you use great description. I like the beat you have going with it.

[~.Miss.Jax.~]


Euphoria_Love

PostPosted: Sat Sep 09, 2006 1:47 pm


That is very good! I think I have read it before at school! Great Job other than a few typo's...anywho..10/10
PostPosted: Thu Nov 02, 2006 5:10 pm


Cooly! I like it, even if it is long.....very long!

starshine_cayalyn


Sanguarian Penguin
Crew

PostPosted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:00 pm


Harra_Wizen
Hahaha, either way, it was very nice! (Why is it I am the only one who seems to not care if guys are 'hunks' or not?)


(I don't care either. As long as he has a great personality...)
PostPosted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 3:30 pm


[Blood Dragon]
Harra_Wizen
Hahaha, either way, it was very nice! (Why is it I am the only one who seems to not care if guys are 'hunks' or not?)


(I don't care either. As long as he has a great personality...)


(Exactly! I requite a good personality!)

Harra_Wizen
Captain


Sanguarian Penguin
Crew

PostPosted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 6:52 am


Harra_Wizen
[Blood Dragon]
Harra_Wizen
Hahaha, either way, it was very nice! (Why is it I am the only one who seems to not care if guys are 'hunks' or not?)


(I don't care either. As long as he has a great personality...)


(Exactly! I requite a good personality!)


(Then why'd you date me?)
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