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 Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 10:31 am
Death has come, never to pass
Shattering the life like glass.
Darkness slowly swirling in
This emptiness must be a sin.
The thunderous, wild rumble roars.
Down below the spirits soar.
No light can push away the dark.
Death has come and left its mark.
A tune plays on eerily.
And so it goes, that melody;
awaking darkness from its past
horrid shadows approaching fast.
All that stays is this cursed song
repeating time, remembering wrong.
So still this day, darkness remains.
It overwhelms in times of pain.
Remember child gone off to rest,
the end will hold no passing test.
And darkness hold power over all.
So in the end, all will fall.
What do you think??? Pleez comment me!
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 10:37 am
eek And you say I'm a good poet? Get real! This is amazing! Love it! 11/10! A++ Wow! That was utterly amazing! I read it aloud, it seemed like I was saying a spell! I love it!
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 10:39 am
wow! thank you! but I still love your work!
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:12 am
*Bowing* Thank you, but your's is still 15,000 times better!
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Posted: Fri Aug 18, 2006 6:08 pm
I love it!! It sounds like something form a book, like amazing!! Love it!! Very proffesional!!
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