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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:19 am
This poem is called Emily. Sorry it's so long. And I'm sorry if your name is Emily too...this will be awkward if it is....lol
As I lie in my bed with tears down my face I think of emily who is in a better place. I attempt to stay still as my heart fills with rage. I want to be free of this nightmare filled cage! I cry and I sob as I think of the day when Emily left, when she went away. They said she'd be back! I trusted them so! I never thought I'd be filled with such woe. She will be back, I just know she will! Her heart is still beating although she lies still. They won't let me touch her, or embrace her small arms. Even though we're so close we are so far apart. I struggle to hold her as they hold be back. I scream and I cry as she lies near those tracks. My best friend was taken. She'll never return. They don't understand how strongly I yearn TO have one more time with emily near. but it will not happen, I know, but I fear. So I as lie in my bed sobbing solfty to sleep. I remember my friend and begin to weep. I think of Emily, Taken away on that day knowing deep in my heart that it will be okay. But I cry as I miss her. Loss stings me like pain. Tears fall down my face like a downpour of rain. I will always remember My best friend's face. When it was lively and happy, not locked in a case. I always will miss those times that we had even though now, it makes me so sad. So as I lie in my bed with tears down my face, I think of Emily Who died in my place.
It's up to you to determine how she died, but I though that was a cool twist at the end.
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:26 am
Oh my goodness! That was so sad and amazing!
How I think she died: Well, I think there are two ways, one, when you said "As she lies near those tracks" I think, she got run over by a train?
And when you forget the tracks "She dies in my place" perhaps you had a disease in an organ, and she gave it up? But then you remember the tracks, she died when she got run over trying to save you.
Either way, immensely sad!
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:28 am
That was the way I kinda though of...I never really established it...I think that Emily pushed the main girl out of the way when she was about to get hit....glad you caught on.
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Posted: Thu Aug 17, 2006 11:33 am
[~.Miss.Jax.~] That was the way I kinda though of...I never really established it...I think that Emily pushed the main girl out of the way when she was about to get hit....glad you caught on. Mother and Father say I catch on quickly, and now my friends say it! Yay!
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Posted: Fri Aug 18, 2006 11:30 am
I love it. You have a similar beat of poetry as me. I like this. When I read it allowed it sounded like a heartbeat. That's just me but if you think about it, it really does. Its kinda weird 'cause one of my best friend's name is Emily XD
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