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 Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 4:25 pm
this is dedicated to my friend who doesnt go to this site but i wanted to know how you feel about it. name: Don't Leave Me Crying
Every day I face, I make you cry
you dont show it but you keep it inside.
You say you are instead of me
but I say, "I do! dont you see?"
each day, when you come home, in the end
I'm glad to see only minor wounds.To tend
each morning, I see you go
each day.Worried it you so
just stay a little more so I can tell
you to stay alive and stay well,
please dont leave me all alone
every night without you I grown
just for one day. Please stay
father, dont go away!
My friend is a girl who has a police man as a father...
tell me what you think.
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Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 7:21 pm
Thats really good and seems so sad in a way and this music Im listening to is making it seem even more sad!!(some type of sad Inuyasha music) crying Ahhh!! Good job.
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Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 7:53 pm
Wow, that's really powerful. I have to tell you, when I was reading it, I thought it was the basic love poem, going to turn out with sex or sadness or crying, or love, but it wasn't. It was a child crying out to their dad and it hit me. It's really powerful and I like it alot. There are a few typos, but that's it.
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Posted: Thu May 19, 2005 10:02 pm
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Posted: Mon May 30, 2005 7:03 pm
I felt like Merenwen99 - at first I thought it was just another romance, about another man and woman, but when it turned out it was her dad, it seemed really powerful and sweet. I liked it.
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