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She was normal, well what she taught was normal was. She lived in a well-to-do city, went to a private school that sort of thing. She had wonderful dreams and goals. She wanted to get married and have a career, but all of this took a backseat to what she really was. She was born, raised, and shall always remain of the pack. She was a wolf, and loved every minute of it.

She taught she was normal because she had to be. She had to fit in with humans in the city. She didn’t mind fitting in for once. She was the odd-ball of the pack, the dreamer. Actually she liked the city. The rush of people, the mixing of noise and music. Really the only thing she hated about leaving the dark, damp, putrid forest was changing her name. She was born bluerose-rain, although it was a common name for her people, to her it was a beautiful name, distinguished. But it had to change; it was now Jane menet, the most uninteresting name she had ever heard. Blue wasn’t the only one to change her name, her whole pack had to. So sunset-amber became Samantha smith. Starlight-black became carol Jones. Even her beloved mother’s name, oceanruby-rain had to be taken and slashed until nothing remained except leana menet.

Her family had moved to the city out of necessity, lack of food and living space. Although the idea of living in a city repulsed her pack, the ultimate choice was the alpha females, her mothers. Her father had died early on in her life, along with her two brothers. That was during the sickness, they lost half the pack that year. All that was left was three young couples their assorted children, her mother, her, and the elder of the pack, her grandfather.

And then it came time for school...

sure, as soon as I get over my writers block sweatdrop

Okay, other than grammer and spelling mistakes, your real problem is that you are writing this as if you were chatting with a close friend, not as if you were telling a story.



"That sort of thing" is one of those phrases that you don't use. "And other, every day activities" or something might be a good replacement.

For once, it seems everyone has already said basically everything I would have said. It's interesting in premise, and would be great abstract or absurdist writing. I just reccomend you dont take yourself too seriously while writing it. If you tried to make us believe this was all actually happening and were dead serious about it, you might make many of us go away. If you toyed with things, and made sure everyone knew the story was meant to be absurd, this would be a great piece of work(in premise.) Good luck with it!