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 Posted: Fri Sep 08, 2006 7:28 am
Ok, well, as a forword, I'd like tot ell you a little about my poem. I said a couple of days ago, in response to a friend telling about a messy breakup, the quite natural question: "Did you eat his soul?" My friends all looked at me like I was insane. So, I decided to explain it to them in poem, making the abstract a little more concrete. It is not my best work, but it's a sample of my poetry. Enjoy!
Eating souls
By that vacant stare on that empty face
And the slack-jawed expression with
Little life or interest
It is obvious to me they aren’t using it
So perhaps I should just do it
Maybe I should eat it
Eating souls with delight and glee
Like some Aztec god
Whose people offer him up
Something particularly tender
Swooping
Diving
Snatching
And withdrawing before
They even have the chance
To wonder where their sense of self
Went off to
Guard the back of your heads
The depths of your mind
I’m coming for your soul
With my mouth watering
To actually consume a soul
To really chew and swallow, chew and swallow
A meal of human consciousness
Would be marvelous
I doubt it would matter what it would taste like
What the flavor of a soul really is
As long as it glows and jumps about
In the pit of the stomach
I would be satisfied
And somehow I do suspect
They will be crunchy
And sweet
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Posted: Fri Sep 08, 2006 12:40 pm
I like it 3nodding I really can't write poetry... You're good! (Well, you're also a lot older than me, I think... xd )
Anyways, I still don't completely grasp the concept, but I understand the poem. Nice smile
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Posted: Sun Dec 10, 2006 6:47 pm
That was really pretty. It was interesting and understanding. It looked deep into things that r real and had an excellent ring to it. Excellent work...
Mumble
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