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Arielace

PostPosted: Mon Sep 18, 2006 3:01 pm


confused It seems that stars are billions of eyes belonging to the midnight sky after the sun turns its back on the moons time to rule.
And to see such a site has became rare in the life of a boy with poor focus
and a girl with no goal.
These days, Men brag about what they have done in one night.
and Women chat about everyone's business including there own.
Therefore, the difference between them is obvious... A man likes what he sees, as a woman see's what she likes.
But regardless of how different they both view life amongst themselves, there is one event in life they will forever view with passion... The wrinkle in time that had brought the two together. neutral
PostPosted: Mon Sep 18, 2006 3:04 pm


sweatdrop Let me know if your confused or have any commets about the poetic fact above.

Arielace


KillJoy444

PostPosted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 6:03 pm


Aside from some grammer glitches,
it sounds good.

keep it up. 3nodding
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