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 Posted: Fri Sep 29, 2006 11:22 pm
I'm sitting in the dark. Alone.
... Just... breathing in the dark. Alone.
Just thinking back. Back to when... when we had something.
... Back to when we were something... were together.
I think about it now. About how things could have been.
But it didn't turn out right. I'm alone. We're both alone.
Now, I'm sitting in the dark. Alone.
... Just missing you in the dark. Alone.
Just breathing... thinking... wanting... loving you. Alone in the dark. Tonight.
What happened to us? To you? ... To me?
Who are we now? Who were we then? Not the same.
"I loved you. And I still do. We are never alone. "((Ok. I honestly think that this one is not nearly as good as my last one. My last poem... had a real inspiration. This one... not so much.))
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 2:44 pm
I think I'm gonna wrote a book and call it the "Me and my Not-So-Good-Non-Rhyming-Poems." Because honestly, I don't think my poems are good. But I get good reviews, so I'll continue writing them.
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 5:20 pm
It wasn't the best nor my favorite poem but it is still good. Not to be rude, so don't take this personally, but it needs more "mph" if you know what i mean. Like, it's good but it could be better, so I hope you take my advice(positively)and try to improve your writing! Good Luck,
Cayalyn
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 3:40 pm
I know what you mean. It's just that I had no real inspiration or experience with it and so it was harder for me to write it, let alone give it "mph."
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 5:33 pm
Yeah I know what you mean! I have some poems in here if you want to read them. Everyone says that they are really good but i don't really like them. I have a journal and i write most of them in there but don't have time to type them out! I'll add some later though...
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Posted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 3:32 am
Yeah. I actually don't like my poems, but other people like them, so I keep writing them. I'll look at some of your poems. ^.^
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