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 Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 10:26 am
hey guys! please comment on this, i will be passing this for our school paper...
this is dedicated to my polaris... but he's already out of my life...
"One Tear Drop"
i never saw it coming
i dont know when it started
how did i come to love you
a stranger amidst other strangers
a numb yet beautiful face
and eyes as deep as the waters
so mysterious and vague
drowning me inch by inch
as stars shimmer in the dark
so as the beauty of your soul
kindness and truth amidst absurdities
and love despite the agony
like an eagle you soar high
above the clouds i cannot reach
your eyes looking down on me
piercing my whole being
look at me as you fly
have pity as i drown
let me see your beauty as you leave
for me to have something to hold on to
rest your wings and come closer
reveal yourself to me
let me see again the tears in your eyes
that makes me see who you really are.
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Posted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 6:41 am
It's nice~!
Very meaningful and deep.
I give it a 4/5.
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Posted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 3:28 am
What a beaut! This is the most touching and and marvelous poem I 've ever read. I keep reading and reading and reading. How brilliant and beautiful!!! There are many nice and romatic similies and metaphors that touch deeps inside your heart. Awesome poem!!!
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Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 9:37 am
It's got a good rhythm...
it's nice, but not original..
it's creative..good poetic diction...
It's a style I read many times..
But good,
you are a poet.
keep up the good work biggrin
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