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Roxas Can Fly!
Captain

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 1:43 am


Gaia Username: Bombad
Character name: Angur (or anger)
Age: ???
Sex: Male
Location: Sealed Away
Affiliation: Heartless
Physical Description: After being sealed away so long Nazgrel changes his shape over time, first looking like a basic heartless and eventually becoming a shadow of what seems like Tessan.
Weapon? Sword and Shield. Strangely the sword has an emblem of the Heartless on the hilt while his shield has an emblem of Mickey’s kingdom, although, it seems rather dull and near broken from overuse.
Shield, Staff or Sword? Sword
Who are you?

Tessan’s Heartless is an unusual one, it began as a basic heartless and eventually evolved into higher heartless. Soon it was gaining strength to rival even the strongest of the Heartless ranks, during Mickey’s adventure during KH1 Mickey ran into this monster and had to seal him away using a bit of magic and keyblade.

The monster’s power was taken away, but recently its power has been regaining, sensing his Nobody counterpart in a nearby world. The lock that has kept it in is weakening and soon will escape its cell to rejoin the heartless, and hunt down its Nobody.

In its weakened state it acts just like normal heartless, only running away when it is weak, although it begins to become independent as strength returns to Angur.

The shield is a mystery, it resembles Tessan’s and yet seems like it is about to break, maybe what was Tessan and Angur were previously not yet fully destroyed? Regardless, it was sealed away by the King himself, but as all things sealed are also waiting to be opened. Where that may be is a mystery…

Sample:

Sora and company found the source of the heartless appearing within Disney Castle, a painting that had a suspicious keyhole. Sora pointed his blade at it and unlocked some sort of door in which a small heartless crawled out. The group seemed disappointed as Sora made a swing for it, but was deflected by its own sword, then a shield appeared and it seemed to stand up on its legs. Now the heartless seemed much more of a challenge then earlier thought of.

((Far later after it gained its power back))

The heartless stood and faced the nobodies; it drew out its blade and shield, and then charged into the nobodies in masse. After clearing the area it glared at Tessan and pointed at him.

“So… my memories are what you want, sorry buddy I lost mine too.” Said Tessan, as he could somehow hear what it was saying.

The heartless seemed dissatisfied with the answer and began to cast a high level spell. Tessan was scrambling away as an Omega spell tore up the area around the heartless. It still craved more hearts, still craved for power, and absolutely nothing will stop it to get vengeance on the one with memories of what it was before heartless.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 1:48 am


I do believe you have a good idea here, but there is a couple of things that I'm not to sure about. I think if it was revised it could be a great addition.

One is him talking, I am not aware of any heartless speaking besides Ansem's heartless, but he is uber pawerfull and all. XD

The second thing is his name. The was already a heartless names Nocturne in the first game.

And I'm curous, why does he carry a shield with Mickey's Crest on it?


**will be updated more tomarrow.

Daye Chan
Crew


Bombad

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 5:38 am


1) It speaks like that since it is gaining power (or regaining) but really Tessan would be the one to understand it until it is at full power.
2) I'll name change, originaly its name was like, Gogeton or something and I thought it sounded stupid. sweatdrop
3) Its Tessan's heartless to his nobody, they both have a weapon resembling thier side and the shield connects them.
4) The shield of both Tessan and the heartless version connects them to a common history before being heartless/nobody.
5) TwilightSora had a speaking heartless someplace, is Twilight still here?
6) Ran out of points xd

Edit: I made a revamp version, do I just send it to Roxas?
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 12:50 pm


Bombad

5) TwilightSora had a speaking heartless someplace, is Twilight still here?


Actually, Gale wasn't technically a heartless. But Twilight left the guild.

Desdemona Winchcombe
Vice Captain


Jezix
Crew

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 1:03 pm


Yeah, Gale wasn't a Heartless, he just had to listen to their leader.

1) If you made a revamp version then yes, just send it to RCF.

2) I don't think I really like the fact that a HEARTLESS, regardless of why, carries a shield with the emblem of the King of Light (A.K.A Mickey, their one, true enemy).

3) Regardless of if it gains power, I don't think a Heartless (besides Xehanort's, but he was like a fluke) should speak at all. Polkana's heartless only have the power to think coherant thoughts, which I think that's even a stretch, but I can deal with. Speech is completely out of the question for me, at least. Unless it's someone like Xehanort's Heartless, which was just freaky and he was the only Heartless who COULD talk. BUt, like previously mentioned by Daye, he was UBER STRONG and the final boss of the whole game, therefore kinda giving him the right to that Godmoding-type power. XDD
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 3:12 pm


Ahh ok, I'm going back to where only Tessan could really understand what it wants (silent or making heartless noises otherwise), i'll get to re-submit after I eat cheese_whine

Bombad


Daye Chan
Crew

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:16 pm


Well, after looking at your new version, I personally think it is better. Although really I don't like that he carries a Micky symbol, but whatever! It's not that bid of a deal.

I'm not sure I like that he can talk to his nobody alone, due to we have talked about a hearltess and nobody connection before, and I don't think that they would have that connestion to be able to talk.

I'm sorry, but I still have to vote no on him. There are a few other things, but Jessie would like to bring them up, so I will let her.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:37 pm


1) Is this thing's name Angur or Nazgrel? Make up your mind, cause that was a little confusing how it went from Angur, to Nazgrel, then back to Angur throughout the course of your application. neutral

2) I still have to stick to my previous opinion about the Mickey emblem weapon stuff. A Heartless (Or a Nobody, for that matter) just shouldn't carry the symbol of their worst enemy on their weapon. I know that in the games Goofy and Donald can get weapons from Nobodies and from Heartless (in the first game), but they don't carry the symbols of those enemies, so I don't believe that the weapons of Heartless or Nobodies should carry the emblem of the very thing that is aimed to destroy them.

3) The talking/communicating thing again. I don't much like that some Heartless in this RP can think, but I can okay it because their thoughts do not communicate with anyone but other Heartless. I have to side with what we Mods discussed about a Heartless and it's Nobody having no connection whatsoever besides a past life.

4) Small issue with the magic that this Heartless just used in your sample. Omega spell = NO. stare I'm fairly sure that you know what spells are and are not used in Kingdom Hearts, so I won't go down a list or anything like that. rolleyes But yeah, no crazy Final Fantasy magic spells other than those used in the game. Not even the Bosses in KH use higher spells than what are used by the Heroes.

5) Your sample is about 92 words short of our required amount. I'm pretty sure that's enough said there.


I'm sorry, but...

FINAL VOTE: No.

Jezix
Crew


Bombad

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 6:56 pm


Hmm ok... how can I explain this...

They both were one person at some time, when a person of exeptional something becomes a heartless they also form a nobody, from what I can tell the heart and spirit. The shield was to be like a red thread connecting the two charactors, as you read Tessan's profile he has the same thing.

Sora by weird circumstance (possibly from Chain of Memories for all I know) was able to have his spirit removed without his body going heartless forever, I was thinking that maybe there is an odd heartless out of so many absorbed, like a mutation I guess, or an incomplete heartless.

My long term thought for when they merge together (which, now i'm seeing not going to happen) they become all 3 things, light, heartless, and nobody, balence of all 3 and eventually permenant protector of Kingdom Hearts.

It was that, or have him join the Organization at some point in which he probably ends up gettin killed in the end.

As for profile, ya, I think its too short too, and cursed my lack of proofreading fully this time. I'll put better effort next time (especialy with other poeples making much better than mine xp ).
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 7:59 pm


Sora has something speacial with Roxas because of how he was turned. In the first game, as I'm sure you remember, he gave his heart up to realese Kairi's. Kairi, whos heart had (as I understand it) went into Sora's to keep from being taken by the heartless. Both of them had something special happen, so both have a special nobody. But they are the only two of there kind, well at least as far as Ansem is concerned.

I would think that if there is a connection between a heartless and a nobody, then every nobody would create a heartless, which isn't the case. Kairi never had a heartless, and Sora was a heartless for a breif amount of time. In the Ansems report, I do believe it says they're the only ones like that.

In either case I think to have a character with this kind of connection, it would be a Gary Stu. And we all like originality, right? XD

Sam Again
Crew


Jezix
Crew

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 8:17 pm


I'm sure we all know how a Nobody is created, dude. XD

1) Sora's connection, as previously stated, is ONLY WITH HIS NOBODY. And that was some freakish fluke of nature, apparently. Sora had a very different transformation into a Heartless than most. Instead of being consumed and falling to darkness, he willingly GAVE HIS HEART TO ANOTHER. He no longer has any connection wit his heartless self, nor does Roxas. The only connection they have is with eachother. Sora was able to return to his normal state from his Heartless state because Kairi hugged him, and when she did it somehow reconnected their hearts and Sora's was restored, leaving only a Nobody behind.

What Daye and I dislike is the connection that your Nobody has with its counterpart Heartless.

Xehanort's Heartless had no connection with Xemnas, now did it? This is what we are trying to say. We don't believe that a Heartless and a Nobody of even the same person would have ANY connection whatsoever, other than the fact that they were once a whole person.


2) Even though we ARE twisting the plot of Kingdom Hearts quite a bit here, I don't think we were planning on making something that was needed to protect Kingdom Hearts. o_O Mainly cause the only Kingdom Hearts that is involved with KH2 is the artificial one made by Xemnas. Besides, if all three parts of the original person whome Tessan and Angur once formed were to re-join, they would only reform as a regular human being again, nothing more.

3) As for joining the Organization...Well, if Tessan were to join, that would be okay cause he's a Nobody. But Angur.... He's a heartless. Can you see what's wrong there? The Organization is a goup of Nobodies, not Heartless. XD
PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 10:50 pm


Ya, I get it. I think i'll just kill this heartless charactor. I'll steer Tessan to joining the Ogranization.

Bombad


Sugichi
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Mon Nov 06, 2006 11:48 pm


That works. You have no idea how horrible I feel for voting no! XD;
PostPosted: Tue Nov 07, 2006 8:07 am


I haven't posted on other peoples characters, I’m too indecisive and I feel neutral at times xp

Also, it would be interesting to develup his powers over time, and now I'll have to think of a Nobody to make.

Bombad

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