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vision of polaris (poem)

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ayesa_levian14

PostPosted: Thu Nov 09, 2006 6:40 am


i wrote this poem when i was riding a bus on my way to school this morning...
i hope you like it... 3nodding

VISION OF POLARIS

up in the vastness of heaven
i drift away and hide.
behind the clouds of the night
i silently wept and agonize

long have i been mourning
for the death of a star
the brightest of them all
beauty and majesty in the sky

seems like yesterday
the sight of you looked so near
so close that i could hold you
and could say that you are mine

but then came the radiant moon
with all glory and beauty
overshadowed by it's radiance
you slowly disappeared

my once beautiful polaris,
now gone in the darkness of night
will we still be together for eternity
or will forever be taken away from me.

 
PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 5:19 am


So beautiful Polaris. I love your metaphors a lot all the stars and the moons and how they shines. Brilliant. You are so gifted.

yeuanhxa


ayesa_levian14

PostPosted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 10:34 pm


thanks!
PostPosted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 12:11 pm


that's really nice. i love the imagery. (:

Shoushitsu

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