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PostPosted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 11:41 am


My first topic here on A&E! heart
Notice: Most of my poetry is unhappy. It's easier for the thoughts to form on paper when I am in a bad mood, but I'll try to post my happier stuff up first.



the flame that lit up my soul
is now burning me up
devouring my spirit until only ashes remain
it's killing me
make it stop
take it away
I can't stand this pain any longer
I just want to feel something else
give me ice over this
let me breathe something other than smoke
clear my life of this
because I need to move on
who gets over the heat of desire
when it's all they've ever felt
nothing compares to what we had
that's all I want
wrapped in the warmth of your love
PostPosted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 6:04 pm


It sounds sad to me. I don't know maybe I read it wrong.

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 10, 2006 7:47 pm


LOL! Yeah, it is sad. But, compared to most of my stuff, it's still more upbeat.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 3:03 am


its nice.. seems u want to go out from all the middle ur sorrow!
Bravo redwatering!

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 5:17 am


Most of the stuff I write is sad too
It's very nice though, I enjoyed it
thank you for sharing!
I think my favotie line was 'devouring my spirit until only ashes remain"
Bravo! mrgreen
PostPosted: Sat Nov 11, 2006 9:16 am


I think my favorite line would be
"take it away"
only because it seems to me that it is the line that screams with the most emotion.

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 8:33 am


i think each line says a lot. a lot of emotion went into your poem. very meaningful and everything.
PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 1:21 pm


I wrote it after an 11 month relationship ended, and I was devastated. You're all correct, a lot of emotion went into this one.

It felt like I was on fire, like everything would always hurt. It was hard to breathe (hence the "let me breathe something other than smoke" line) and I just wanted to be over it so bad.

I love it when people can see what you're trying to convey through your writing. Just LOVE it. heart biggrin

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