I LOVE reading long super descriptive RPs so here is a place to practice making things more descriptive.

There are three ways to do the lessons:

1. You can post them here, and recieve critque here.

2. Post here and recieve critque via message.

3. Send them to me via message and recieve critque via message.

If you choice one or two others will be welcome to critque your form, which is nice as you get more feedback, however if you are shy, only I will read it and you will only recieve critque from here.

First lesson: Seemless character description...

I have seen some wonder one RPs here doing this but we'll practice here as well. I'll be using a made up character.

Natsuko:

Long black waist length hair, curly
purple eyes
5'6
slender
gothic

Now you could write it:

Natsuko was pretty, she had long curly waist length hair, bright purple eyes. She was 5'6 and very slender, often dressing very gothic.

That works, but it's not seemless transition into the RP.

Natsuko stared at herself in the mirror. She loved her beautiful features that stared back at her. Smiling wickedly she smeared purple lipstick that matched her intense eyes on her lips. She stood up, her full form standing 5 feet 6 inches in height. Laughing she rushed to her closest, her black hair glisencing and swaying about her waist. Pulling a beautiful black gown over her slender, lithy frame she giggled wildly.

See how the second one puts the description into the roleplay?

So now it's your turn to try:

Kali:
Red hair, shoulder length
Bright green eyes
5'4
hourglass figure
loves shades of blue.