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 Posted: Tue Dec 19, 2006 5:24 pm
This was writen for one of my future stories. Okay, here goes nothing....
A place and a day, a long time ago
Came a man from a far off land
An honorable manner he carried so,
The sword of justice in his hand
The peasants and people who lived in that place
Had nothing to do but mope
But when they set eyes on that kind trusting face
They had one more reason to hope
There was an evil king who ruled over all
His methods and ways were cruel
So that lone man vowed to see him fall
And set up a kind health rule
They thought him mad, the king was too strong
He simply could not be beat
But he showed them how, not before long
And they set off to accomplish this feat
The day of the battle was finally here
They were ready to make their mark
When the other side did then appear
It began at the first signs of dark
In a trice the arrows screamed through the air
And sword blades flashed in the night
Many in battle were sent to death's lair
Then one stoke ended the fight
The night was gone, the battle was fought
The red sun rose over all
They could not believe the slaughter they'd wrought
In hopes to see the king fall
A sword fell from a nerveless hand
He could not believe what he'd done
He'd only brought carnage unto this land
Not the battle they'd won
And then the lone man fell into night
The deepest and darkest despair
Never again would he join a fight
No one would witness him there
That lone man just might have been gone
If it were not for the actions of one
They brought him forward to see the new dawn
To show what still had to be done
They marched right through the fortress gate
Into the lair of the evil king
They quickly ended his reign of hate
And of the lone man they did sing
He founded a library, a place without fear
A place to learn in so many ways
And there he stayed for many years
Happily for the rest of his days
So whenever you walk our shelves and pick up a book
And you hear a whisper in your ear
You shall know, wherever you look
That the one lone man of legend is near
Please no just dissing the poem. If it's going to be a negative comment, keep it at constuctive critisism. I already got a really nasty comment a previous time that I posted this on the main forum.
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Posted: Wed Dec 27, 2006 9:05 am
Wow!!!! that was like a short epic...
I like it. Especially how you keep very consistant rhymes biggrin
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Posted: Wed Dec 27, 2006 9:14 am
Good! That is what I wanted it to be like! It's supposebly a story of how the libray in the story was founded.
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Posted: Thu Mar 15, 2007 4:28 pm
If I were you, I'd only add more spaces; it looks intimadating
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