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 Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2005 12:37 pm
*Red pulls out the siscors, and cuts the red tape*Painted Black, a place for you to post your poetry without the critics who put down your dreams of poetry, or the guys who say you are grammatically incorrect.
Rules:
please don't stretch the page.
If you have any poetry that is very long, please decrease text size to make it so that readers don't have to scroll down a lot to read it, or to get to the next poem.
No bumping... that is already in the rules, but I just want that to be clear.
No extreme criticism. you can give some constructive criticism to help out, but no grammar/spelling corrections, since any "mistake" might actually be under poetic license, saying that they are horrible, or just plain saying the poet themselves suck at it.
No advertizing other threads/guilds/posts unless they are in your signature.
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Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2005 12:52 pm
a poem by me dear friend who is moving away:
Rambling of a madman
� Stephen Stann
I�m very metaphoric
They�ve all said it.
�Oh you meant doors when you meant life choices!�
Well, how do you know?
You�ve never been in my mind?
Have you?
All I did was sit here.
And Write.
And breathe.
And digest that pizza from lunch�
Or was it from breakfast?
Regardless, you swooped down on me,
And said �Oh your writing!
Can I see?�
And I replied, quite the gentlemen,
�Oh! Why, yes. Here. Read this.
My friends tell me it�s one of my best.�
And you sit there,
And read,
And thought it through,
And handed it back,
And slowly replied,
�You�re very metaphoric�
I laughed
�Of course I am!
Who writes poetry without metaphors?�
But no,
I replied
�Really? I had no idea!�
My voice oozes with sarcasm.
And now I sit here,
I sit and write.
And I say to myself,
�Metaphoric? I�ll show them METAPHORIC!!!�
And so I write on,
Oblivious to my microwave,
Which has just beeped,
Telling me my mac and cheese is done.
And so I go on,
Very well knowing how metaphoric I am,
And knowing just as much that I haven�t used,
A metaphor at all.
Nope. I haven�t compared,
Applesauce to quicksand
Without like
Or as.
Not I!
But then,
Who would believe me!
After all,
I always mean something else.
Since I am
Very metaphoric.
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Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2005 1:22 pm
holyredccphysicist post your poetry without the critics I have to stay out then... sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Jun 23, 2005 8:14 pm
[BombazineDoll] holyredccphysicist post your poetry without the critics I have to stay out then... sweatdrop you misinterpret me. I said without the critics who put down a person's dream of writing...etc.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 7:49 pm
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 7:52 pm
your poem is too tiny for me to read sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:03 pm
As I look to the past, I see much pain.
Yet when I look at the present it begins again.
In the past armies ransacked, piliged, and burned,
And still in the present, what have we learned?
Families are homeless, out on the street,
While dictators conspire, steal, and cheat.
Yet the world goes on, ignoring their transgression.
Even with the appearance of violence and aggression.
Why haven't we listened, why haven't we learned?
Why haven't we stopped them, had the tide of history turned?
Is this a cycle that we are doomed to repeat?
Endless, moving, impossible to beat?
Or is this a time for all of us to go,
Take a stand for our beliefs, change history's flow.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:04 pm
electriclilly your poem is too tiny for me to read sweatdrop there, I fixed the size, but the punctuation was messed up...
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:27 pm
holyredccphysicist electriclilly your poem is too tiny for me to read sweatdrop there, I fixed the size, but the punctuation was messed up... But it's readable now, that's the important part.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:53 pm
Wow, this place sure took off.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 8:58 pm
Briskfire As I look to the past, I see much pain. Yet when I look at the present it begins again. In the past armies ransacked, piliged, and burned, And still in the present, what have we learned? Families are homeless, out on the street, While dictators conspire, steal, and cheat. Yet the world goes on, ignoring their transgression. Even with the appearance of violence and aggression. Why haven't we listened, why haven't we learned? Why haven't we stopped them, had the tide of history turned? Is this a cycle that we are doomed to repeat? Endless, moving, impossible to beat? Or is this a time for all of us to go, Take a stand for our beliefs, change history's flow. *snaps fingers an claps*bravoo bravooo very well done i love it
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:06 pm
crimsontweety603 Briskfire As I look to the past, I see much pain. Yet when I look at the present it begins again. In the past armies ransacked, piliged, and burned, And still in the present, what have we learned? Families are homeless, out on the street, While dictators conspire, steal, and cheat. Yet the world goes on, ignoring their transgression. Even with the appearance of violence and aggression. Why haven't we listened, why haven't we learned? Why haven't we stopped them, had the tide of history turned? Is this a cycle that we are doomed to repeat? Endless, moving, impossible to beat? Or is this a time for all of us to go, Take a stand for our beliefs, change history's flow. *snaps fingers an claps*bravoo bravooo very well done i love it *bows* Thank you.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:07 pm
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:08 pm
not a problem any time heart
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:49 pm
Briskfire As I look to the past, I see much pain. Yet when I look at the present it begins again. In the past armies ransacked, piliged, and burned, And still in the present, what have we learned? Families are homeless, out on the street, While dictators conspire, steal, and cheat. Yet the world goes on, ignoring their transgression. Even with the appearance of violence and aggression. Why haven't we listened, why haven't we learned? Why haven't we stopped them, had the tide of history turned? Is this a cycle that we are doomed to repeat? Endless, moving, impossible to beat? Or is this a time for all of us to go, Take a stand for our beliefs, change history's flow. that was great, brisk... do you have an encoure piece?
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