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Just a little something I threw together...

The Stars
The stars, they shine so brightly
They light the sky in a swirling dance
They twinkle, fade, and reappear
They put most all into a trance
Some soar, some stay, some twirl about
But most just twinkle, fade, appear
They light the sky in shows of light
They blink, wink, swirl, twirl, reappear
Putting most into a trance
Induced by their swirling dance

(It's syllables)
Thank you for the critique!
I'll see if I can work on it a bit, make it longer and the sort.
And that long line is supposed to be said kinda fast.
It's weird, but when I write, I come up with this specific rhythm, and if you hear it out of that rhythm, it sounds kinda off ^_^;;
It's kinda like (For that specific line):
Du--DA-Du--DA-Du-DADADA
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And the line you said sounds a bit off, it's another thing where you have to say it just right ^_^;;;;;;

I'll see if I can edit it to be a bit easier to read...