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 Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 8:02 pm
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Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2005 1:18 pm
Pardon me, but this has been up six days. I thought this was a writing guild. scream
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The Bookwyrm Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 5:56 am
I would definately say edit your story, and post it in smaller pieces. Iy's not clearly divided into paragraphs, and unfortunately quotes don't "copy/paste" well and leave the story looking an untidy mess. If you can't take the time to tidy it so it's a bit easier to read, don't be surprised that no one is commenting. And as for that, it's a problem I fully intend to set about rectifying.
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 8:19 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 3:55 pm
the story was alright, but you need to do some cleaning up on the paragraph structure.
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