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 Posted: Thu Jan 11, 2007 4:07 pm
Howdy all. Soon my first work of fiction will be posted and I hope to hear some positive feedback, and constructive criticism. I know that one can not become better at what they do until they know where to focus.
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Posted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 5:08 pm
I feel like I have been taking a really long time getting my first paragraph posted. Some rather unfortunate things have been happening in the partner guild The Roleplay Society, that have kept me from being able to focus on my actual writing. Luckily, that situation may soon be over and things will be less rocky here.
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 3:26 pm
The Goddess of Veriden seems very unnatural to me. The story doesn't seem to flow right now, but hopefully things will straighten out and I will probably go back and rewrite the opening.
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 3:32 pm
So far to me... your story's rated E10+
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Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 3:39 pm
xp I know, it's nowhere near as graphic as I would like. I'm going to touch things up once I get the ideas flowing better. Everything is happening to quickly with little attention to detail. Usually things move slower and I'm able to really feel it out, but since I am at work everything is kinda on rush mode.
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Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 8:42 pm
I like the nightmare its a new idea...I never thought of that! so its original....well in other thoughts...i dont think! hahah rofl
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Posted: Wed Jan 24, 2007 3:52 am
Something tells me the hero is actually a criminal, hmm. Don't forget to add a handsome cop who rescues the girls from the hero's nasty clutches, lol. Just kidding, good overall though...
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Posted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 10:46 am
meiryou na rikai I like the nightmare its a new idea...I never thought of that! so its original....well in other thoughts...i dont think! hahah rofl
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Posted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 10:48 am
Nutter05 Something tells me the hero is actually a criminal, hmm. Don't forget to add a handsome cop who rescues the girls from the hero's nasty clutches, lol. Just kidding, good overall though...
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Posted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 3:32 pm
LittleBlackWolf Nutter05 Something tells me the hero is actually a criminal, hmm. Don't forget to add a handsome cop who rescues the girls from the hero's nasty clutches, lol. Just kidding, good overall though... Your doing a wonderful job. *nods* I love the detail in the dreams. And I'm sure Lene probably hoped for a hero. *Laughs* You know what I mean Amanda. ^-^ Anyways...like I said. Great job. Oh and your other story rocks too. ^-^
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Attic_Flowers Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 5:43 pm
well I like it becuase maybe i have lots of huanting dre3ams.
But being original i think...is very important.
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Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 11:26 am
Originality is one of the most important things in my life, along with Truth, Love, Honor, and Imagination.
My strong point in writing is dialog, which I haven't been using a lot of in either of these stories, however I plan to soon feature one of the stories I had been writing like crazy last year, and see if I can't get things progressing. It is another very original topic and I hope it will catch others interests.
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Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 6:22 pm
yes Truth, love, honor, and Imagination is very important...I would also say faithfull is a important .
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 3:23 pm
I do concider Loyality in the same as Honor, for one who is disloyal, is also dishonorable. I value loyality very much. ^^
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:05 pm
yeah...I do a lot of honor when i fight...other people...anyways...thats not related to this...BUt i like the new add to the story...
Random thing i found
"Real love stories never have happy endings...Becuase real love stories never end"
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