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The True Kamikaze

PostPosted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 1:35 pm


Today Tiny Timmy tries to talk. Terry Thomson tells Timmy that talking is too tough for a two-year-old. Tony Thomson tells Terry not to tell Timmy that. Tammy Tilson tells Tony, Terry and Tiny Timmy that Tinseltown has two tall towers, Tinseltown Toy Tower and Tinseltown Trinket Tower. Tammy tells Tony that there's a Two-Year-Old talking translator there. So Tiny Timmy, Too-Tall Terry, and Talkative Tony travel to Tinseltown. While traveling, Tony talked to their Treasurer, Tommy. Tommy told them to talk to Tina. Tina told Tony to travel tirelessly. Then, during the Thomson’s travel, Tina traveled too. At Tinseltown, Terry taps a tambourine, Tony talks to a toucan, Tina throws a truck, and Timmy traverses to the trinket tower. Then he finds the two-year-old talking translator. It translated to this, why does this poem have so many T's?
PostPosted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 1:37 pm


I hope you like it, it's my first official poem that I like. Please gimme some critique.

The True Kamikaze


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PostPosted: Thu Mar 15, 2007 10:08 am


I like the poem a lot; it's amusing and inventive. As far as poem style, it reminds me a bit of Shel Silverstein. Which is a good thing. The only problem I had is this: Since there was no verse or spacing, it was hard to not lose your place occasionally, especially with all the 'T's. But keep up the good work!
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