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The Cage of Humanity

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Teh Stripe
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 4:24 pm


((Alright, I put forth an effort on this one. It's supposed to be a Villanelle poem, which has a really strange structure. So, yeah, the repetition of the lines is the poem structure, not my laziness. My English teacher said that a lot of people spent their entire lives trying to write a good one of these. >.> I had it finished before lunch today, and so far everyone has been impressed. Hah. I'm going to try and turn it in tomorrow to see what he does.))


The Cage of Humanity


We have always been locked in our own cage
Hanging out of reach - the key to the door,
Eternally expressing our old rage.

We always fear to take the center stage.
Helpless and witless, we cling to the floor.
We have always been locked in our own cage.

As we begin to get wiser with age,
We begin to hope that there will be more,
Eternally expressing our old rage.

We are always told to turn a new page.
But so few wish to explore that new shore.
We have always been locked in our own cage.

There's something in others we cannot guage,
And that something can strike us to the core,
Eternally expressing our old rage.

It does not take the advice of a sage
to see the reason for eternal war.
We have always been locked in our own cage,
Eternally expressing our old rage.
PostPosted: Fri Jan 26, 2007 4:38 pm


Cool smile The structure made it interesting to read. I like that rhyming structure, and I can see how it could be hard to write...

I don't know much (or anything?) about poetry, so I really have no critique. I did like it, though.

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