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 Posted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 6:57 am
It's not much, but I wrote it last night when I was bored. 4am much? xD
SPEAK
Shining,
RAW and silver,
it seals your words with an
unkind touch.
You struggle to breathe,
but your mouth is filled with
LIES,
choking you with their s w e e t arms
around your neck.
You wonder, and you
wish as you dig
DEEP,
pulling, tearing, scraping the glue free
from your lips; red.
Burning, PANIC sets in,
and though you wish to scream
you don't, because that makes you
WEAK.
So silently you take your
punishment and pick,
and scratch, and pull
and hope that
W O R D S aren’t as adhesive as you
thought.
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 10:03 pm
I'm a 3am writer myself razz lol. But your poem is really good- deep- meaningfuly- really great!
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Posted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 4:31 am
I like the use of underline and spelling the words out and the other visual devices you've used. Makes it a unique poem. And it lighthigh certain words to me attention. Cool 3nodding
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Posted: Mon May 28, 2007 6:23 am
I like metaphor of glue from your lips. heart Never thought of it that way before.
I also really liked how you made important words stick out with the bloding, italicing, etc. Overall, I liked it ^^
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 9:20 pm
This is pretty good...
Yeah, nifty with all the different ways of emphasizing certain words. I loved it like that, but I'd never be able to pull anything like that off!
I know I just mispelled something. Now... what was it?
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