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 Posted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 7:47 pm
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 11:24 am
I've read the first chapter so far, and I will read the rest.
I hope you don't mind criticism... :3
The good: You've got the characters down pretty well, and that's always important. And the fic is cute so far! I like it.
The bad: I don't really like dialog fics, but that's just a preference. Description can make the story that much more interesting. The only other thing that bugged me is that you switched tenses near the end. XD;
But it's good so far. 3nodding
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