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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 1:20 pm
(this is is my first time doing this. this is something ive been thinkink about all day) the girl walked down the hallway. she looked scared and was constantly changing direction. her name was Alida. she was young despite the color of her hair it was sliver, pulled back into a neat yet ladylike plait though frighted she carried herself like a Goddess she turned suddenly again this time entering a doorway to her left
the room was a bedroom asleep on the oversized bed was a boy about her age he was called manoach and he was ill at this time (and this is where im blocked,suggestions please)
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 4:40 pm
Very good so far. Perhaps you can add something as to what is going on. The boy wakes up for a moment to talk to her a little.... Or she talks to him while he sleeps.... But that is merely my opinion.
By the way, welcome to the guild! It is nice to see someone join and not forget that they joined in the first place.
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Risky Sammich Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:04 pm
(oh this is what i live for i want to write and illustrate my own novels thanks for your opinion!!) alida didnt want to be here however it was her duty she wanted so to be away from this place! it was a place of death and she never knew when it would be her time to let the darkness take her always running from something that stalked her waiting in the eaves of each building
this boy would probably die soon the infection had already progressed to the piont where he no longer woke in the day he just slept Alida wondered what it would be like to be so ill she herself had never been ill in her life it wasnt someting she ever wanted to experience yet she was among the ill every day mostly those injured in the war men and fae alike were treated here sighing, alida let her cover drop it was so difficult to maintain it all day Alida was a changeling a faery switched at birth with a human child the fae, curious in nature study the childs behavior and the child remains eternally young (i better stop here before people get bored of reading what do you think??)
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:29 pm
((At first I was going to go on gramatical rant but then I saw how it was formed like a poem. Very different, and I could actually deal with it. Anyways....
I like the way it sounds and wouldn't mind joining you. Is it okay if I rp as well?))
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:32 pm
of course!! i love new ideas!!
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 6:47 pm
now only 3 inches tall alida flew silently and alighted on the bed strecthing her wings after all day in her cover felt lovely the cover dulled her supernatural senses and made it easier to treat men and elven patients it was simpler to be thier hight but the heightened senses were sometimes needed for healing (im looking for rp now ...anyone??)
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 5:24 pm
this is not the best of ideas but...
why don't u have her have to heal someone who's really sick so she changes into fairy form and gets cought and has to explain ???
it's just an idea
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 5:32 pm
but some of the nurses are faeries so that wouldnt work
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 4:43 pm
((Curious is this in the style of a group story? Like multiple people rping the same RPC? I've noticed both Hanawie and Che-che47nixieano posting like this.
If it is I cannot help you, its simply not a strong point of mine. Although I would gladly place in my own character and do a more 'traditional' -I could be wrong on which came first- roleplay.))
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 3:06 pm
everyone is welcome to place thier own character in the story im new to rping and didnt really understand it sorry redface dramallama dramallama
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 8:49 pm
((Ah I see..... I would suggest you join a rp and see how they work. That or set up a plot or theme for the rp. In other words give an idea of the setting so people can make characters to interact with the plot/setting.
BTW when you talk outside of the rp either place it in (()) or say OCC: at the beggining. That way people know if you are writing more for the rp or not.
Also its very brave for you try your own rp. 3nodding Kuddos to you for that!))
A girl with light blonde hair walked about the halls of the hospital, lazily looking about. She was about the height of a human child, very petite looking, Her ears were pointed at the tips, from her elven blood. How much elven blood she had was unknown even to her.
She wondered over to a window, looking out into the bright sky. Her gold eyes sparkled in wonder as she watched a small butterfly fly by. She followed it, moving from one window to the next. A soft smile played across her face as she found joy from this simple task.
Suddenly she bumped into a wall, the windows ending there. A with a light 'omph' she fell back. She cringed as she touched the ground with her right arm. Black bandages were wrapped tightly about it, reaching from her wrist to her shoulder. Symbols were etched into the cloth, looking like a healing or containing spell. Even so it still hurt when she moved it, let along fell on it.
Standing up slowly she rolled her shoulder, a sudden frown appearing. The black greatly contrasted her light skin and hair. Even her clothing was white and gold, making the black look omnicent and menacing. "Aya, what are you doing out of your room?" One of the passing nurses asked. Aya took a step back, suddenly her hands behind her back.
"I-I'm sorry," she stuttered, shifting her foot nervously. "I-I just wanted to take a walk." And the room is a bit boring. She thought this in the back of her mind as the nurse looked her over. Finally the nurse sighed and gave a nod of aproval. She wouldn't have to go back to her room, yet.
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