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 Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 3:44 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 6:55 am
interesting content versus the title...............
i like the soft ryhmes and the ending 'until every emotion has been slain'
good work
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 4:07 pm
This poem is well-written. Very dark and kind of mysterious, too. I liked it.
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 5:40 pm
I can thell that you really thought this one through. Very concise, not a word wasted. Kudos.
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 6:05 pm
I really like this.
The lines "Empty thoughts dream of love Where love has never been before.
Kindness cowers behind a dark soul. Swallowed up in trespasses that
Stain your heart black as coal." really stood out at me.
I like all the imagry that goes along with this poem, the line about the phantom images rising up.
Great job. ^_^
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 11:10 am
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