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 Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 8:44 am
This is just a little poem that I wrote for my poetry class last year. We had to do an Ode poem, and could use another poem to base it on and get ideas.
Ode To A Dust Bunny
Dust bunny
Under the bed
Under a desk
looking like
a cuddly bunny rabbit
without the ears
or the
cute
button nose
I know you won't believe me
but
the dust bunny comes alive.
Alive at night
hopping around
growing its ears
and cute
button nose.
But when
morning dawns
it returns
to an old
regular
ball of dust
laying dormant
until the moon
rises again
and the bunny
comes back
for another
night
of play
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 10:15 am
This is kind of funny. blaugh I like the way you made this poem "human" by not having everything perfect but saying "I know you won't believe me." However, this may have a few too many syllables, just because the rest of your poem has very short lines. This could be the form of an ode, I honestly have no idea how to write one, so if they have a certain form that you followed, it's probably just fine. Perhaps you should disregaurd my advice and take some from someone who knows a bit more about odes. . . I like it, whether I'm an ode expert or not!
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 10:19 am
Wow, I really like the story of the dust bunny! It was very interesting to read- one thing that greatly improves any piece is punctuation to help the reader know when pauses and breaks take place. Of course, maybe there isn't suppose to be punctuation in odes- I really don't know, but if it's not against the ode rules, I think it would help. It's a very clever and cute piece!
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 10:43 am
Thanks you guys. smile I'm glad you liked it. As to the way it was written, there really no set way to write an ode. Just something you're writing your feelings about or like in story form, kinda, about something that is unusual or usually wouldn't have much importance to people. As for your suggestions, I'll keep those in mind for future poems. ^_^ Thanks again!
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The Bookwyrm Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 11:08 am
Ah, form poetry. When it's well done, and this to me is well done, it can be a fantastic and fun style of poetry. And I love the satire. Every time I've ever studied an ode to anything, it was stuffy, sappy and too serious. This takes the style and applies it to something, shall we say, frivilous and adds a wonderful a whimsical amount of fantasy to leave the reader with a chuckle and a smile. Great experimental piece!
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