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hospitalflowers

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 3:51 pm


A lot of my poems are quite terrible.... but I'm going to continue posting the "okay" ones here..... {None of them are very good, but I still have ALOT of time to work on them, since I'm only 13! ^.^} so yeah, I wrote this the other day out've complete BOREDOM! So yeah, here it is........

Maybe?

A long time ago,
Maybe I was happy?
Maybe we were happy?
But who were we?

Were we who we are now?
Or some childish clowns?
Did we live out our dreams,
And make it to the big screens?

But what is done,
Cannot be changed.
And maybe we never were.
Maybe, just maybe.
PostPosted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 4:32 am


Ah, a somewhat nolstagic-like poem. I liked the fact every-almost every line was a question. It gave a different tone to the poem.

Cool cool

Queeny
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 22, 2007 8:11 pm


Thanks!
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 9:26 pm


Questions are a wonderful way to write.

(They also confuse Sophmore English teachers, even at the AP level. Especialy when you write a standard essay such as the TAAS or whatever they call it now in complete questions for three pages.)

You're good... I'll be reading the rest of your stuff shortly.

The Original Yaoi Fanboy


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PostPosted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 8:11 pm


I've read some of your work, and I like everything I've read. It's all great!
You're a great writer, and you speak from your heart and soul. Very good.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 6:24 am


For a 13yr old you have a good thought process for writing. I enjoyed the poem. The poems I wrote back when I was your age (saying that makes me feel old biggrin ) weren't half as good. Writing a poem that is all questions and having it make sense is not as easy as people thing.

GOOD JOB!!! I look forward to reading your other work!

Vampoctavia

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