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I want to submit this to a contest at my school, but I want to see if it's actually good, first.

A simple simle, full of hate,
A fling of passions past the gate,
Haunting eyes, filled with ire,
Screams of the dead, burned by fire.
Harsh words, fired like lead,
Voices resounding in the head,
Whispers of lies thrash in the air,
Loathing hearts, covered with tears.
Blurred fists rush around,
Adding to the hectic sound,
Dodging attacks, twice as fast,
Over wrongs from the past.
Time stops for them to abide,
Slowly eating at them up inside,
They start to catch every look they baked,
Remembering all the times they faked.
Time renews,
The dire choice they have to choose,
They stop their attacks,
And turn away from stabbing backs.


Is it any good?

i like it 3nodding