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tis a poem I wrote reflecting my life right now

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wizardwarior3

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 12:18 pm


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- I have a friend who is so dear,
- Tis always good to have him near.
- but this friendship will not last,
- this i fear.
- Events of the past show that her love will appear.
-I care for both with my all,
- Yet tension causes friends to fall.
-It's very difficult to choose,
- True love or friend which shall i lose?
- Whichever one that i pick,
- My decision will surely have to stick.
- The time has come to make a call,
- For i must pick ere the last petal falls.
PostPosted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 12:19 pm


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PostPosted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 9:23 pm


could someone at least read my work???
PostPosted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 7:53 am


I don't like it very much. It just doesn't capture my attention enough.

kitsunefandom


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PostPosted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 5:48 am


it was ok, I would give it a 6/10
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