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 Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 2:25 pm
WARNING THIS IS DARK
there are three stories this is the first
Maria< I have all ways a waited my prince to come and save me from this prison>
Maria< This is my tale of a dream that ended that many called a nightmare where everything lies awake when it should be asleep>
Maria< A young lady was killed in a tragic massacre at exactly midnight on Valentine's day. Its said that she was stabbed to death. People say she was beautiful beyond comparison to any but did not care for living. Her soul remains in the old rotting castle still waiting for her prince>
Natsuki: Damn it I can't find Pochi
Boy: You mean your sisters dog
Natsuki: Yeah I let him out of my sight for a second and he ran off
Girl: He probably went to Catsle of Nightmares
Natsuki: Isn't that the place Lord Kyotachi talks about all the time
Boy 2: Yep its said a long time ago that the before the Kyotachi's family took the throne the true royal family had died in a massacre the princess was said to beyond beautiful
Boy: Yeah but they said her cold look could freeze anyone's heart
Girl: Well that should be the old castle but its haunted but most likely Pochi is probably dead
Natsuki starts heading for the castle
Natsuki< My sister is going to kill me if that dog is dead>
Natsuki arrives at the castle and goes inside
an arrow hits the wall it scrathes his face
Maria: Why are you here
Maria glares at him
Natsuki< That glare give me the chills could she be the dead princess>
Natsuki: I am only here to find my dog
Maria: So this is your dog
dog comes out from behind Maria's dress
Natsuki: How can you be standing here when your dead
Maria takes his hand and puts it to her heart
Natsuki
Maria: that is right I am dead
Natsuki: How old are you
Maria: 517 but I died when I was 17 years old so I maintain that appearence how old are you
Natsuki: Yes but why is it you still maintain your physical appearance me I am 17 years old my name is Natsuki
Maria: Even I do not know that but my name is Maria or princess maria
Natsuki: What happened to everyone else
Maria: they are dead I made graves for them
Natsuki: Pochi come here we are going home to sis
Pochi: grrrrrrr
Maria: He doesn't want to leave I guess
Natsuki< Why does her aura seem so sad and lonely>
Maria: You can stay the night if you wish since its raining
the next morning
Natsuki: Morning Pochi
Pochi starts running
Natsuki: Pochi where are you running
Natsuki chases Pochi all the way out side to a grave
Natsuki: what is this
Maria: My sister's grave
Maria puts flower around the graves
Natsuki: were you two close
Maria: No I wasn't close to any of my family why are you so curious
Natsuki: No one knows what really happenedlike how your family died
Maria: Go read the books in the castle's library
in the library
Natsuki: a diary
Natsuki reading alloud: Dear Diary why is it everyone loves Maria everyone pays attention to her no one even notices me I'm her sister and not even my parents even remember she has a sister sometimes. She is always so cold to everyone adn doesn't want attention adn ignores people yet they all love her why do they love her I just want to be loved I want her to just disapear she is my twin. Everyone thinks she is so perfect Maria this Maria that who cares. I wish she would just disapear. She doesn't even care about anyone she just wants out of this family that praise her and loves her. She is so spolied she should just die. I wish she were never born. I hate this her and this family why can't they love me. I am getting married to a prince ofa foriegn land atleast I am getting married before her all she does is wait around for a prince. Today is my wedding day I am so happy someone will finally love me. My parents were talking about how Maria has an uncurable disease and she won't live to be 18. I can't wait till then
Natsuki: She really hates her sister I should keep readin
Natsuki reading alloud: I've been married a week now and I found out my husband wanted to marry Maria cause he had fallen in love with her. I hate her I don't care if she is my twin I hate her. I've decided to kill her tonight. Then everyone will love me
Natsuki turns the page
Natsuki reads alloud: I have killed my sister but now my family looks at me and horror saying I'm a murderer she deserved to die she wanted to die anyway she said kill me. My own husband hates me now too along with the rest of my family. I killed my husband today his last words were I hope I join Maria. Why does he love her so much? I shall kill everyone tonight since they can not love me and then I shall kill myself.
Maria walks in
Maria: Now you know how everyone died
Natsuki: But why did tell her to go ahead and kill you
Maria: I have nothing I'm living for I have no one to live for my family feared me bcause I was so cold but loved me because I was perfect but also hated me for those exact reason no one has ever cared for me
Tears trickle down Maria's cheeks
Natsuki: then why are you crying
Maria: Shut up I'm strong
Natsuki statrs walking towards her
Natsuki: I don't know why thye hated you or thought you were perfect I don't understand it at all
Natsuki hugs her
Natsuki: You're just an ordinary girl not perfect just you
Maria stops crying
Maria: your wrong I'm perfect
Maria runs off
Natsuki runs after her
Natsuki: Damn it I can't find her
the next day
Natsuki: If found her but she's sleeping
Natsuki carries her home and put her on top of her bed
Natsuki: She looks so peacefull in her sleep so different then the way she usually looks
later Maria wakes up
Maria: I'm back home
Maria walk in to the hall way
Natsuki: You're finally awake princess
Maria blushes
Natsuki: Are you blushing hahaha
Maria: Shut up
Natsuki: See you aren't sad anymore
Maria: You carried me all the way back here thank you
Natsuki: Why don't we put some new flowers on your sister's grave
at the grave
Maria: I never hated my sister in fact she was the only person in family I loved but she hated me I didn't mind dying since no one loved me
Natsuki: That isn't true she didn't hate you she may have wrote that in her diary but the aura that her grave is giving off is loving and kind and at peace but sad
Maria: Why is it we were twins but we could never understand each other's feelings
Maria get a little teary eyed but holds back her tears
Natsuki: You don't have to act so strong even strong people cry sometimes everyone cries so if you want to cry you should cry
Maria starts crying
Pochi licks her tears
Natsuki: I really wish you weren't dead
Natsuki and Maria kiss
Maria: I think I've found my prince thank you
Maria starts shining her body starts slowly becoming glittering dust
Maria: haha I'm finally joining my sister right after I find my prince life just isn't fair
Natsuki: But you can't turn to dust yet I love you
Maria: I love you too but I guess this is good bye Natsuki
Maria completely turns to dust
later
Natsuki makes a grave
Natsuki: I will find a way to bring you back my princess
Maria narrating< I finally found my prince I hope one day we shall join up again after all I am dead and my prince is living our love shall last an eternity
the end of story 1
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 6:56 pm
Story 2
Nami< My name is Nami ever since I was little I’ve been in love with this guy he never has given me the time of day now I’m 17 I’ve loved him for 12 whole years he doesn’t even notice I love him>
Ran: Can I borrow money from you
Nami: You have to break this habit of borrowing money you must get it from your dad
Ran: I’ll pay you back soon
Ran leaves
Nami< SO many girls are in love with him yet I’m the one girl he won’t look at I’m just one of the guys. However he is in love with Asaya-chan one of my closet friends>
Asaya runs up to Nami
Asaya: Hey Nami
Nami: Hey Asaya so when are you going to answer Ran didn’t he ask you last week to go out with him
Asaya: Yes I want to answer him but nothing he wants to hear
Nami: but he is a really great guy< how could you say no>
Asaya: But don’t you love him
Nami: No he is like a brother< I just want him to be happy>
Asaya: Fine I’ll answer him soon
Nami: I need to get going home
At home
Nami: I’m home mom
Mom: I need you to take this to Ran’s mother she left it here today
Nami: Sure
Nami< I can never tell Asaya that I love Ran or she won’t go out with him I don’t care what happens to me because I love him>
Nami ring door bell
Ran’s mom: I never want to see you again good bye
Ran’s mother: Oh hello Nami-chan I’m sorry but you caught me at a bad time sorry
Ran’s Mother runs off
Nami: Hello Ran are you there?
Ran: Hey
Nami: What happened?
Ran: nothing
Nami: Your ran off crying and screaming and also I can tell by the look on your face and also I’m guessing she couldn’t take your father’s gambling problem and debts seeing how she just took off
Ran: It’s not your problem
Nami: I’m making it my problem
Ran: Why can’t you just leave me alone I hate you
Nami: Fine what ever
Nami runs from Ran as he stands there
It starts raining
Nami sitting on the curb with a kitten next to her
Nami: Hi little cat I’m gonna call you hana
Nami: Hana I really screwed up he hates me now
Nami starts crying
Hana: meow
Next day at school
Asaya: Ran I heard about what you said to Nami
Ran: I should apologize
Asaya: She never went home last night and she wasn’t in school today
Ran: I need to find her
Asaya: You don’t really like me do you. You love Nami don’t you? You just don’t want to tell her you are in love with her
Ran: …
Asaya screams: Well answer me
Ran: yes but I just don’t know how to tell her sometimes she is more like one of the guys
Asaya: you are a real idiot go after her and find her
Ran runs home
Ran: dad I’m leaving I need to find Nami
He bumps in to some big men in suits
Later
Nami: Hello Ran are you here?
Ran’s dad grabs on to her leg he has a stab wound in his chest
Ran’s dad: Nami thy took Ran I owed some yakuza some money I need you to go to the bank and take out everything in our account then bring it to me so I can take it to the Hitoruka clan headquarters
Nami: alright
Nami runs toward a bank
Inside bank
Nami: I need you to take all of the money in this account
Bank teller: Ms this is a lot of money and it says its for college on our computer file
Nami: please just do it
Bank teller: alright
Nami calls Asaya: Hi Asaya I need you to do some research on where I can find the hitoruka clan
Asaya: Your family is worried sick and those people are yakuza
Nami: Please just do it
Asaya gets on computer
Asaya: go to the old abandoned subway where we used to take the train as kids
Nami: I need you to take the train there and make sure one of the doors is open
Nami takes the bag of money and runs for what she was told was the Hitoruka head quarters
Nami runs in and sees the yakuza holding Ran tied up
Nami: Come out I’ve got the money< I’ve got to help Ran I have to untie him>
Yakuza boss: Well throw it here
Nami throws it to him
Yakuza boss looks at it
Nami runs to Ran and unties him
Yakuza boss: this ain’t enough lady
Yakuza 1: can we play with her I want to test my new gun
Nami whispers: Ran run and get the police
Ran whispers: I’m not leaving you
Nami: JUST GO
Nami pushes Ran on to a moving subway which Asaya is on
Yakuza 2: This is going to be fun
Yakuza 1 shoots the train
Nami runs towards Yakuza 1 and 2 and pushes them but Yakuza 2 stabs her
Yakuza: You are getting our nerves kid
Nami grabs there arms
Nami< I have to protect him because I love him and because I’m just not good enough for him>
Yakuza boss shoots her
Later
Ran comes with police and Asaya
Ran: Hurry before she get hurt any more
Ran spots a completely Nami’s corpse full of bullet holes and stb wounds
Ran runs to her corpse
Asaya: what happened to her why her damn it why her
Asaya starts crying
Ran: why couldn’t you have just run away or not have even come. You would have been safe then, its just not fair why did you have to die.
Ran: I wanted to tell you I loved you
A few days later at Nami’s funeral
Asaya: We were just too late
Ran: It feels like it was just yesterday she was here laughing and smiling
Asaya: Yeah
Ran: But she just disappeared from our lives
Asaya: we should get going its starting to get cold out
Nami narrating
Nami: Good bye my friends who I treasured and loved
You see Nami’s spirit hug Ran from behind
Nami: I loved as I lay dying and when I was living
You see a flashback of Nami being shoot by the yakuza boss
Nami: I will love you forever even in death
And that is the end of story 2
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Posted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 6:02 pm
Story 3
Its snowing
Makube: Please go out with me
Chie: Fine but on a few conditions
Makube: what are the conditions?
Chie: you can not touch me< He’s never going to accept these conditions>
Makube: Fine
Chie: okay pick me up 5 pm at Tokyo station on the 18th that will be in a week
Makube: Yes
Chie walks away with her friends
Chie< My name is Chie I am 17 years old.>
Ami: That guy is not good enough for you Chi-chan
Nana: Yeah he just seemed too bland not very hot either
Erika: Yeah you should date someone like Seiku
Ami: No way Chi-chan should choose who she wants obviously she likes that guy
Chie: Actually I made a few conditions for him if we dated every other guy didn’t agree to the conditions or I turned them down actually Ami
Nana: That is so harsh Chie don’t you agree Erika
Erika: Yeah how could you do that to that poor guy right Ami?
Ami: No Chi-chan should only date someone who is good for her
Chie: I need to go later
Nana: I always thought she was so kind but she really is nothing but some spoiled rich girl
Ami slaps Nana
Ami: How can you talk that way about your friend?
Nana: She wasn’t really my friend to begin with I only wanted to get closer to her so guys would look at me
Ami: How can you do that to her
Nana: She is nothing but a sham she looks perfect but is nothing but a vain egotistical girl
Erika: Still I’m friends with her for the same reason but I at least became real friends with her
Ami: Erika come on let’s go and leave this traitor behind to find Chie
Ami and Erika leave
Erika: wait do you even know where she is
Ami: Yeah at the hospital
Erika: WHAT
At the hospital
Doctor: You have to stop pushing your body
Chie: Yeah Yeah I know
Ami runs in with Erika
Ami: Uncle how is her condition
Doctor it keep getting worse soon she will have more frequent heart problems such as heart attacks
Ami: I told you since we were kids to stop pushing yourself don’t do gym and stop running
Chie: I refuse to go back to the hospital
Erika: What is going on?
Ami: Chie has an extremely bad heart and was once an inpatient at this hospital she lived here and they examined her heart everyday but now she comes in one every 2 months to get her heart checked out she also has trouble breathing often
Ami: JUST STOP PUSHING YOURSELF
Erika: I agree we’re your friends we care about you
Chie: I need to go
Chie runs out into the snow
Chie sitting in the park on a bench
Makube walking in the park spots Chie and sits down beside her
Makube: You seem down what is the matter
Chie: my friends want me to go back home
Makube: I think you should do what you feel is right and what you believe in. Why should you do something you hate when you don’t even think its right or agree with it?
Chie< I never noticed he was so considerate> right…
Makube
Makube: Why don’t I go get some drinks to warm us up I’ll pay?
Chie: Sure
Chie< For once in my life I wish I had a better heart as well as better lungs>
Chie: cough cough
Makube comes back
Makube hands her a drink
Chie: It’s really nice when its snowing because everything is covered in white
Makube: Yeah and it also is so pure
Chie< He is the first person other then Ami to get this close to me with out knowing my condition>
Chie< It feels like I’m actually starting to want to live freely again>
Chie: cough
Makube: Your gonna catch a cold dressed like that here you can use my jacket
Makube hands Chie his jacket
Makube: Oh I have to get going I need to get to work
Chie< He really is a good guy>
The next day at school
Chie: I made an obento to thank you for keeping me company yesterday
Makube: You’re welcome
Makube eats the obento
Makube: This is really good
Chie blushes
Chie: thanks
Next day
Makube: Can you show me how to do the math we learned in class
Chie: sure
The day of there date
At Chie’s house
Chie< somehow I don’t know when I started actually falling in love with Makube>
Chie: Ami do you think I should wear this
Ami: Yes definitely
Erika: Why don’t yo wear these shoes too
Chie: thanks guys I’ll see you later
At the train station it’s snowing
Chie waiting
Chie: He is late cough
Makube running towards her
Makube: sorry I’m late
Chie: Why don’t we go eat?
Makube: Sure
At the Ramen shop
Chie: I love ramen this is great cough
Makube: yeah it is really good the best place in town oh why we don’t go to the park
Chie: sure
Makube pays the bill
At the park they are walking
Makube: I love the snow
Chie: Yeah snow is so beautiful. It seems like it will keep falling forever
Makube kisses her
Chie: what was that for?
Makube: Because the snow is beautiful like you and I love you
Chie: You know we really do both love the snow and I also love you
Chie starts running around in the snow spinning
Makube< She looks so happy>
Chie: cough
Chie starts clutching her chest
Chie falls over
Makube runs over to her
Makube: Someone call a hospital
At the hospital
Doctor: I told her not to push herself
Makube: What exactly is wrong with her?
Doctor: She has a bad heart and is having a heart attack. She’ll probably die soon if she doesn’t get heart surgery, but there are no donors available and it would be too difficult to find a donor this quickly
Makube: I’ll become a donor
Doctor: what did you say!?
Makube: I want to give my heart to Chie so she can live
Doctor: We would need your parent’s consent
Makube: I’m already 18 years old I just got my license
Doctor: very well then
Makube scribbles something down on a piece of paper and hand it to the doctor with a box
Makube: Please give this to Chie after the operation
In the middle of the operation Chie dreaming
Chie< am I dying>
Makube hugs her
Makube< No your still alive but I have to go>
Chie< No you can’t go>
Chie grabs his arm and kisses him
Chie< I love you so don’t go>
Makube< Sorry but my time I gave away>
Chie< to who?>
Makube< To you of course good bye>
Makube disappears
Chie wakes up sweating in hospital room
Chie: what happened?
Chie clutches her chest
Doctor: We found a heart donor for you
Chie: No don’t tell me
Chie with shocked expression
Chie: WAS IT A GUY NAMED MAKUBE
Doctor: yes
The doctor looks down
Chie starts crying
Chie< Why did this have to happen right when I find a reason to live it disappears forcing me to live>
At the grave
Chie: Makube I am going to become a doctor so that next time I can save someone from the feeling of being lonely after losing a loved one, just like the way I lost you
Chie place flowers on grave
Chie: Good bye I love you
Makube’s ghost stands watching her
Makube
Makube
the end check out my other stories and pm me with your ideas or feddback or i f u just want feedback on ur own stories
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 11:29 am
well... they're ok, but you need to work harder
maybe have more detail and excitement
I've got to say that you wrote it kinda boringly, but I liked it
maybe try working on writing skills? blaugh
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Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 12:23 pm
sighs I know that buts that is becausew they are SCRIPTS as in when I get off my lazy but eventually I'm gonna try drawing them like comics
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