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 Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2007 8:13 pm
heres something i wrote a while ago just wanna see what people have to say about it.
"in your arms"
from the moment we first met
there was just something about you
and it didnt take long for me to see
you might just be the one for me
in your arms
i can feel your love
it gives me the strength to carry on
in your arms
everything else just disappears
its the place i never wanna leave
where nothing can get to me
in your arms...
ive got everything i need
just having you by my side
each day is like a whole new world
your only showing to me
each time i see your smile
you steal another piece of my heart
and all my dreams are coming true
ever since i feel for you
in your arms
i can feel your love
it gives me the strength to carry on
in your arms
everything else just disappears
its the place i never wanna leave
where nothing can get to me
in your arms...
thanks to all those who have read this and i look forward to comments and opinions and i have a bunch more if anyone else wants me to post more or anything like that.
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Posted: Sat Apr 14, 2007 8:03 am
You might want to capitalize your i's because I always believed that proper grammar helps to build the seriousness of the poem and will gain you more respect as a writer. Please keep the poetry coming though.
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Posted: Sat Apr 14, 2007 2:56 pm
"What would you do?"
What would you do
If you really knew
All the feelings I have for you
Would you cry and walk away
Or believe them so true
What would you do
If you really knew
That everything I am
I am because
I fell for you
What would you do
If I held them within
And you never knew
Just how I Truly felt
All because I as afraid
Of being hurt again by you
What would you do
If you really knew
That everything I am
I am because
I fell for you
What would you do
If tomorrow never came
And you never knew
Would you still be the same
Or would something change
Deep within your soul
What would you do
If you really knew
That everything I am
I am because
I fell for you
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Posted: Sat Apr 14, 2007 3:02 pm
"Friends till the end"
The road from which we've come
Might be a little short to some
But the distance that weve come so soon
Has meant the whole wide world to me
We've gotten so close as friends
Now this chapter is coming to an end
But no matter where we go from here
You know we'll always be
Friends till the end
We've shared so many laughs and dreams
Been through some times that were good and bad
And you know that when you leave I'll be sad
But I'll always carry your love with me
We've gotten so close as friends
Now this chapter is coming to an end
But no matter where we go from here
You know we'll always be
Friends till the end
Even though I know you'll keep in touch
It just won't bethe same without you
You could always cheer me up when i was blue
And I'll be missing you till the day we meet again
Now as you go on with you life
I hope I'll be on your mind time to time
Because you know you'll always be on mine
And I wish you the very best
We've gotten so close as friends
Now this chapter is coming to an end
But no matter where we go from here
You know we'll always be
Friends till the end
From the bottom of my heart
With these words spoken true
I hope you'll carry this poem with you
And cheer you up on the darkest days
We've gotten so close as friends
Now this chapter is coming to an end
But no matter where we go from here
You know we'll always be
Friends till the end
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 9:44 pm
hmmm not really anybody posting very much on here, thats not good. lol. anyways still really wanting to hear some feedback.
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 12:13 am
I rather like "In Your Arms" but I'm not that fond of "What would you do?"
^_^
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:31 am
I actually like "what would you do?" a lot.
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 3:58 pm
im glad that you like em. eek biggrin eek well since i got a couple people actually reading i guess ill post a couple more when i get the chance.
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Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 3:05 pm
Sounds good, read mine when you get the time to. Please and thank you. biggrin
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Posted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 3:21 pm
"seemingly lost"
It's always hard when you have to move
Having to say goodbye to the ones you love
But no matter how far we are apart
You will always be close to my heart
Sometimes it seems like youve lost everything
And feels like youll never be the same
But after awhile things start to cheer up
Because its the friends that make life fun
And no matter whatever happens in your life
Youll always have a friend in me
You can always count on me
No matter how hard things get to be
All it takes is a call and Im there
As friends we make the perfect pair
I cant wait till I get to see that smile
For awhile weve been seperated by miles
Been a long time since I wasent blue
Cuz everyday Im missing you
Sometimes it seems like youve lost everything
And feels like youll never be the same
But after awhile things start to cheer up
Because its the friends that make life fun
And no matter whatever happens in your life
Youll always have a friend in me
So if you ever need someone to talk to
I will always be here for you
Witha ahelping hand and open ears
Well be good friends through the years
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Posted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 3:39 pm
"The Perfect Girl"
Some say theres no such thing
Its just an opinion if you ask me
Others will tell you they found that person
I believe theres a perfect somebody for everyone
It starts with the basics
Honesty and trust and sincerity
A good sense of humor and wonderful personality
Having fun being with each other no matter the occassion
After that you see somebody that knows you
Better than you know yourself
Someone who can cheer you up
With a smile and a hug
Everything about them just seems to good to be true
Yet is true anyways
Its that one person who seems like theyve walked right out of a dream
They get along with family and friends
As theyve known them their entire lives
She knows what youre thinking and feeling
Even before you totally know
Its that wonderful feeling you get
Just knowing how much they care
Usually starts as friends but soon after
Turns into something much more
Some says theres no such thing
Its just an opinion if you ask me
Others will tell you they found that person
I believe theres a perfect somebody for everyone
When youre together the world dissappears
Everything else loses meaning
Except for you and her
Forever just isnt long enough anymore
And it will leave you, always wanting more
Its the unbreakable bond of love you share
Forever and always "Till the end"
the "Till the end" refers to the other poem titles friends till the end, both were written about a real good friend in my past.
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Posted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 7:36 pm
I <3 perfect girl with a passion.
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 12:09 am
^ after reading perfect girl now you see why i left the comment on ure topic about loving free verse, a lot of mine are just the same so im with ya on that one.
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 12:38 am
"My eyes see what my heart knows"
When I think of us
All that weve been through
I put a smile on my face
And brush all my fears aside
Theres been a change
Grown from a boy to a man
Now Ill do the best I can
To never make you cry
This years been so long
You never gave up on me
Now my eyes can finally see
What my hearts known all along
Now were moving on
To the next part of our lives
But Ill never lose sight
Of the strength of love we share
Watch the time go by
These days turn into memories
But theres one thing that is true
My eternal love for you
Some of the past weve lost
But Ill cherish this time
Now my eyes can finally see
What my hearts known all along
Now I pass this on
These words spoken true
I just want you to know
That my heart belongs to you
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 12:44 am
this one is a little different than the others wrote. most of em i wrote just sitting around messing around with a pen and paper, this one on the other hand was written during a time of anger lol. well hope you enjoy.
"The Sting"
Its lurking in the shadows
The people are unaware
A creature undiscovered
What are you gonna do?
Cuz theres no place to hide
And it's too fast to outrun
And you won't know thats it's there
Until you feel it, watching you
Cuz when you feel the sting
There is no escape
And when you feel the sting
The feeling comes upon you
So you better be prepared
Or you'll be in despair
When it's time to feel the sting
And it's taking over you
It's something that cannot die
Almost impossible to control
It's living inside you
Where are you gonna go?
Cuz it's with you when you hide
No matter how fast that you run
And when you know it's there
Its too late cuz its, taken you
Cuz when you feel the sting
There is no escape
And when you feel the sting
The feeling comes upon you
So you better be prepared
Or you'll be in despair
When it's time to feel the sting
And it's taking over you
It can be caused by anyone
The worst of enemies
Its hidden in everyone
How will you handle it?
Cuz it can push away your friends
And tear apart your life
You realize theres nothing you can do
Because you know...that it's...part...of...YOU!
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