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 Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:26 pm
 Haltija – A Ghosts of the Past Quest
This is my first time around Ghosts of the Past. I stumbled in lost and alone.
I've been looking for a really good shop with Breedables that emphasized Role Play.
And Lo and Behold I find Ghosts of The Past.
May the Fates be kind and allow me to join this aweinspiring group!
Edits:
1. Edits grammatical errors.
2. Broke up Personality and Description into subgroups.
3. Made Past life story all past tense.Introduction |The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future | The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:26 pm
 The Haltija is a Finnish gnome-like creature that protects a place or thing. There are many types of Haltija. Some protect places in nature such as lakes and forests, others protect graveyards, still others protect personal dwellings. All Haltijas have certain powers based on the Vaki, or 'domain', they are part of.
Vaki means both Magical Power and Domain.
A Haltija whose Vaki is Water has the ability to heal or create illness.
A Haltija whose Vaki is Fire has the ability to destroy and to heal through warm air. (Sauna)
A Haltija whose Vaki is Iron can cause wounds of the blade and remove wounds.
There are Vaki's of many different types, including: forest, woman, death, and wood.
Many times the Haltija of different Vaki are at ends with each other. And can be used against each other. When wood is being burned it places that Vaki of Wood against the Vaki of Fire.
If a person is made ill by a Vaki of Water, they may try to call on a Vaki of Fire to heal them.
Haltija have the ability to shape shift into any shape they find most appealing. they take many shapes including human and animal. And can be male or female.HaltijaFinnish MythsIntroduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future | The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:27 pm
Deep in the southeast of Finland lies a magnificent Lake, the largest in the nation. The Saimaa Lake is a beauty of incomparable proportions. It's waters have been home to fabulous animals, such as the Ringed Seal, and whose shores have been home to civilizations since time immemorial. Saimaa is also home to many of Finland's Haltija, protectors. Haltija to protect its waters, its beaches, its animals, and the villages upon its shores!
For centuries the Haltija of Saimaa lived in harmony, purifying and cleansing the lake and its surroundings, cursing those who dared to disrupt the ways of its water, and blessing those who helped to keep it safe and beautiful.
Sevan, The Haltija of the Northeast side of Saimaa, spent glorious years upon glorious years in the waters of the lake bestowing the gifts and curses of the Vaki of water upon the families of the land. Ensuring Saimaa's continued prosperity.
Sevan's love for the land grew deeply over the generations, as she watched over and cared for the lake and it's surrounding inhabitants. And as each generation aged and slowly died, a new generation rose from the ashes as a phoenix to form a new family.
Slowly the villages on shore grew and expanded. They became not villages, but towns. And with the towns came more Families. Sevan did not trust these families, to her they were new and had no right to invade her homeland.
In anger she cursed the town's inhabitants and stopped purifying the water. Many of the families, old and new, were ill with an inexplicable sickness. High fevers and cold sweats were common, as were dizziness and loss of apatite. The water took on a green hue and was thick with moss and algae, and the smell of rotten leaves. Many of the old families took heed of the signs, and understood that their beloved Haltija was was angry. Nevertheless, the new families chose to ignore the signs, who really held with such superstitions anymore anyhow?
The old families came together and provided Sevan with a sacrifice of Milk and Fruits, in hopes of appeasing Sevan's anger. Seven knew that she was being foolish, and that she loved Saimaa too much to let it wither away. She lifted the curse and cleansed the waters. Soon the lake was back to its former glory.
She learned to love the new families as strongly as she loved the old. She worked harder than ever keeping Saimaa beautiful and pure, determined never to let her anger harm the lake again.
Soon, the town became a small city, people head the blazon tales of the beauty of the lake, ad came to the area for the peace and serenity of the lake side city. Sevan embraced the newcomers, hoping she would learn to love them as she had the others.
Knowing the the small city was a place for the rich to come to get away, others soon followed, hoping to get jobs providing luxury services to the rich. As the small city became a large city, a trade in seal skin and fat was burgeoning.
The killing of the seals angered Sevan, but remembering her past mistake, she held back her anger, for fear of making another, bigger, mistake. She loved her families, and knew that they too cared for Saimaa, and would never wish pain on the lake or its Haltija.
The trade in deal products bloomed into a thriving lifestyle. Traders and merchants poured into the city, each hoping to get rich. The city began to industrialize, textile mills and factories were cropping up everywhere. Dumping gallons of wastes into the beautiful lake.
Still Sevan held back her anger. She understood now that this was the way of things and stealed herself to work harder to keep Saimaa clean and pure.
More and more years went by, industrialization reached a peak, as did the trade in seal products. Galleons upon galleons of toxic waste was poured into the water everyday. Most of the seals were killed, those that weren't were dying of toxic poison. Sevan tried to heal the water, but everyday it got more difficult. She tried to clean up the toxins and heal the seals, but the little she was able to effect, was back again the next day.
Sevan still loved her family, and she was glad to see them prosper. But she feared it wouldn't last much longer, the poison was closing in, destroying everything.
She tried harder everyday, but nothing seemed to penetrate the dense toxins. Slowly the poison ate at her. It continued until one day the pain became too much. She felt her body clench up, all her muscles tightening, her heartbeat slowing. In vain she tried to heal herself, but she was too weak.
Sevan let go. The Haltija of Saimaa was gone.
*Disclaimer: I used quite a bit of artistic license here. Saimaa is a real lake in Finland, and there are many cities around the lake. However, Saimaa is still very clear and beautiful. And I doubt very much that anyone in Finland would want to mar its vast beauty by dumping anything in it.
 Introduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future |The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:28 pm
 The GhostName Halle Linna Gender Female Race/Species/Element Haltija Hair and eye colors She has blue hair with silver streaks, and purple eyes. Distinguishing Marks Deep Blue Water drops on the backs of her hands. General likes and dislikes Likes: The Water, Rest, Being Playful, Games, Silliness! Dislikes: Crowds, Loud Noises, Meeting New People. Hobbies
Abilities Curse: Can create illness in people and animals, and blight in plants. As a child she can only create very low level illnesses, such as the common cold. However, the older she gets the stronger illnesses she can create, up to cancer.
Heal: Can heal illnesses, blights, and wounds in people, animals and plants. As a child she can only heal minor illnesses, blights, and wounds, but as she ages her ability to heal strengthens until she is able to heal major illnesses, blights, or wounds. Swim: Beginning as a kid she is highly proficient at swimming. She can navigate waters very well in any type of setting. Empathy: When she reaches the stage of Youth, she becomes very in touch with other people's emotions. She can understand others emotions very well, and react appropriately to them.
WeaknessesCrowds: She can't handle large crowds, they make her very uncomfortable. She reacts like a claustrophobic person in tight spaces. She feels the dire need to get away from all the people. It can cause her to panic and hyperventilate.
Immune System: She has a weak immune system, and is highly susceptible to illnesses. The GuardianName: Tyra Dominick Gender: Female Age: 21 Race: Human, Half African-American, Half Caucasian. Occupation Student Height: 5'2" Weight: 105 lbs Hair and Eye Color: She has very dark silky black hair, and green eyes. Skin Color A deep creamy brown. Body Type: Very short, with an average build. Personality: Tyra is quite the social recluse. She has a hard time making friends, mostly because she doesn't want any. She's friendly enough from a distance, as long as you don't cross her boundaries. she is a fastidious worker, and usually has all of her assignments down well ahead of time. She doesn't have a 3.87 GPA for nothing. Appearance: If a person were to look at her and label her, she would surely be labeled "Nerd." She tends to wear baggy jeans and a tight t-shirt. She is always sporting her thick-rimmed glasses she's blind without them. Her silky black hair is almost always kept up, out of her eyes. Rarely is she seen without a book in hand. Biography: At the age of 18, Tyra's parents send her off to the local university. More to get her out of their hair, than out of any since of hope for their daughter future. Nevertheless in the three years she has spent at the university she has received a top-notch education. Growing up, her parents, although wealthy, were not very good parents. Rather Cold and distant, they let the Nanny provide care for Tyra. It didn't bother Tyra one little bit. She loved Nanny, and enjoyed the long hours of conversation she could spend with Nanny. There she taught Tyra to read and write, and to love learning. A Lesson Tyra kept close to her heart all of her days. Introduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future |The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:29 pm
 Personality and DescriptionWand During her Wand stage, she has a long main shaft, light blue in color, with long thin silver streaks running down the length. The tip has what appears to be dark blue water droplets. Baby Ghost In her Baby ghost form, she appears as a light blue mist, tinged on the outer rim by silver. She makes this noise that sounds an awful lot like "Guiweee." But Tyra can't figure out quite what that means. The Mist also has a tendency to roll forward, if Mist can really do that... Baby The Personality: She seems to have grown extremely attached to Tyra in such a short amount of time, she's always clutching onto Tyra, and wants to go everywhere with her. She loves playing games and her favorite is "Sneak-up-on-Tyra-and-surprise-her!" Although she is very attached to Tyra, she appears to not like other children. When she has to spend time with them, she is unusually quite, and not very playful. The Looks: The Mist slowly comes together into a solid form, and a Baby is born. She has very long, straight, light blue hair, with silver streaks running through it, highlighting her face. Her skin is a dark tan, as if she had been in the sun a very long time. Halle has vivid purple eyes, that gleam in the light. On the backs of each of her hands are two identical deep blue water droplet-shaped marks. She is dressed in a short-sleeve silver dress, that falls to her knees. With little black sandals on her feet, and a black bow tie in her hair. The Powers: Occasionally, around the house, Tyra notices that she needs to care for her plants less and less, they seem to have gotten used to her busy lifestyle and learned to adapt to less watering... How odd. Toddler The Personality: She has made one or two close friends that she is comfortable with now. She is very playful, and very innocent. She enjoys games like Hide-and-seek, and Tag. She's not the fastest runner, but when they play a game in the pool, she always wins. She likes her friends a lot, but when they bring new people she doesn't know, it makes her feel very uncomfortable, and she usually winds up going home. The Looks: Having out grown her dress and sandals, she now favors jeans and a silver t-shirt, with tennis shoes. She lets her hair, which has grown several inches, fall unencumbered now. The Powers: Some nights, usually when she has met knew people, she has disturbing nightmares. She doesn't understand what they mean, but she certainly wishes she did. They leave her feeling scared and drained. KidThe Personality: She enjoys playing games as fervently as before, and she has a tendency to rough house now. She has taken on a more accepting attitude about others. She tends to ignore those she doesn't know yet, instead of being afraid of them. She has learned that she loves being in the water, and swims as often as she can, even if she can't, because Tyra has told her not to.
The Looks: As a kid Halle still favors jeans, tennis shoes, and a t-shirt. The Powers: She has begun to notice a lot of changes in the environment around her. She can tell that when she is upset, people tend to get ill, and plants start to wither. However, when she is particularly happy people seem to be more healthy and plants seem to blossom. Sometimes she tries to see if she can effect it on purpose, but usually to no avail. Her dreams come more often, and she tries to put them together, to figure out what it all means, but that usually only leaves her confused. TeenagerThe Personality: She now remembers her death vividly. All the pent up emotion is bubbling over the sides. She is extremely angry. Although she wont admit it, the person she is most angry at is herself, for not having done anything about her death long before it happened. Usually when she feels this way, she goes to visit her closest friends. They have fun together, goofing off, which makes her feel a lot better. she's less uncomfortable with new people now. Although to them she might seem a bit distant, resentful, it's only because she is so used to ignoring them.
The Looks: In a fit of frustration, while trying to manage her hair, she cuts most of it off. Her hair is now only about chin-length. She also wears a short silvery/white skirt with a tight black top, and boots. The Powers: Because of her emotions, her powers are not fully functional, many times when she wants to heal something, she winds up harming it. Which only adds to her frustration. YouthThe Personality: Almost grown, and by now out of the house. She has faced her demons, and come out the better for it. She is less of an emotional wreck now, and has learned to forgive herself for her own death. She is a bit more serious now that she has gone through all that she has. But she's always ready to get loose and have a little fun.
The Looks: She wears a long, knee-length silver flowy skirt, and a white top. Her shoes are white slip ons, and her hair has grown a little, but only a little. The Powers: She now has better control of her powers, although there is always room for improvement. In her youth, she notices that she has become much more in touch with other's emotions. She seems to understand their feelings, and connect with them. Adult The Personality: Ah Adult-hood. Every child wants it, every adult wants it to go away. Finally Halle has blossomed into the person she was meant to be. She has embraced herself for who she truly is, and forgives herself for every flaw. She has overcome her demons, and is ready to begin life a fresh. She is still goofy, and playful, and she still doesn't like crowds. But now she is able to tolerate meeting new people.
The Looks: Her hair is now down to her waist, and she lets it flow freely that way. She wears a long silky silver dress, down to her knees, and black slip ons. The Powers: Her powers are more in control than ever before, and she loves to experiment. She is now able to majorly effect the health of all people, animals, and plants. Be it to heal or hurt. Introduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future |The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:30 pm
 Coming in the future!
Introduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future |The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:31 pm
 Other Stuffs: Tektek of Tyra:  Introduction | The Haltija | The Past | The Present | The Future |The Journal | Misc
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Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 6:32 pm
Officially open for Questing!
Comments and Critiques are needed Loved!
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:34 am
I really love the past life. I felt sorrow for Sevan as she was poisoned to death by industrialists. I think it is the highlight of your concept.
Some of the sentence in the Personality and Description section feel like they shouldn't have started that early, as if the period was placed prematurely.
"She is dressed in a short-sleeve silver dress, that falls to her knees. With Little black sandals on her feet, and a black bow tie in her hair. Her favorite food is Milk and Strawberries." For example, with the segment I just quoted, you could remove the comma after "dress" and "that", replace the period before "with" with another comma. In the third sentence about favorite foods, you could say favorite drink and favorite food. When I first read it, I thought you said milk was a food and not a drink, but I then understood. ^_^'
You follow a similar writing style with the rest of the Personality and Description section, and my main recommendation for that is to make the sentences flow smoother. Double-check your word usage, like in the Teenager stage. You said, "She know remembers her death vividly" when I think you meant "She now remembers her death vividly". Just some minor convention errors.
Other than that, you have a really nice concept. <3
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:43 am
Awesome! I really enjoyed writing the past life.
And thanks for the advice about the Personality and Description section. I wrote it rather quickly last night. I'll go do major editing!
[Edit] Alrighty, I've done some major editing on the grammar/typing errors in the Descriptions!
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 1:53 pm
Ya it really surprised me when I saw a few grammar errors in YOUR writing XD It was odd. I enjoyed it, good read XD
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 2:43 pm
Ah yes but there is one major, yet often over looked grammar problem. The entire past is written in such a way that it is almost painful to read. Stories you know, especially of past events, need to be written in the past tense, not passive active. I understand the effect you were looking for, but re read that last sentence objectively. Does it really make sense? The entire past should be edited for this fact.
Further I suggest you check with Kyri about the "curse" ability and ensure that it isn't too close to her plague power of her jinn or that she doesn't mind that you have something simular.
Lastly as wonderfully long as your descriptions for each stage are, consider lists to make it easier to read. IE separate out personality wardrobe, interests, abilities at that stage as an example.
Your quest looks beautiful, good use of banners and formatting. smile
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Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 4:24 pm
Faeyas Ah yes but there is one major, yet often over looked grammar problem. The entire past is written in such a way that it is almost painful to read. Stories you know, especially of past events, need to be written in the past tense, not passive active. I understand the effect you were looking for, but re read that last sentence objectively. Does it really make sense? The entire past should be edited for this fact.
Further I suggest you check with Kyri about the "curse" ability and ensure that it isn't too close to her plague power of her jinn or that she doesn't mind that you have something simular.
Lastly as wonderfully long as your descriptions for each stage are, consider lists to make it easier to read. IE separate out personality wardrobe, interests, abilities at that stage as an example.
Your quest looks beautiful, good use of banners and formatting. smile
Thanks for the advice! I'll definitely separate the description, I was thinking about doing it, and wasn't sure if I should. Now I know.
And I'll have to ask Kyri about that curse. I hope she'll let me keep it. It'll be difficult to think of another power that goes well.
And thanks so much for the advice about the past. Only the end is like that, and I thought it might work that way, but now that I reread it a couple days later I so see what you mean!
*Goes to do more major editing*
[Edit] Alright:
The Future Post has been edited to include a Personality, Looks, and Powers section.
And the past life has been edited so that the end is in past tense like the rest of the story. (Except the first paragraph, but that just wouldn't make since in past tense... heart )
Anyone else wanna rip my thread to pieces?
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Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 8:19 pm
I saw you posting in the main thread about the Curse power and I had an idea since you wanted something to affect humans... Maybe she can manipulate existing illnesses in people? Which would tie together both healing and amplifying it. Like she could take someone with the flu and cure them or make them end up with pneumonia (or however that's spelt). Just an idea... but she wouldn't be creating it like Kyri's jinn, but instead taking an existing condition and changing it. *nods*
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Posted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 3:47 am
That might still be too close to her Dijinn's power. I hope not those, because I like it.
Because technically her cure power only manipulates existing illnesses, so it makes since for curse power to do the same.
But that is cutting it really close.
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