This is a novel/very long, long story that my girlfriend and I are writing together. Please tell us what you think, but before you do that, please read the message in red at the bottom of this post.
Summary:
A forensic scientist and a major airline pilot. One has a secret love for the other, while the other is holding a different kind of secret.
Here are the first few paragraphs of the first chapter only:
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In Washington, west of the Cascade Mountains, there was a very large and populated city called Guadaloupe. The city was filled of cars, pollution, idiots, and people. It was considered suburban, for it was on the outskirts of the major cities. There were many public services available for the people living there such as theatres, malls, drive-ins, hotels, airports, schools and libraries. Speaking of schools and libraries, there was actually a university known as U of G and a library not too far away from it.
The Chaske Public Library was a large complex set in downtown Guadaloupe. It was surrounded by several small shops and food stores and beside it sat one of the three local DMVs, while across the street was the University of Guadaloupe. It was always crowded with some sort of people, whether it be students, kids, or people waiting for their place in line at the DMV. It was a building made of stone but plated in granite, and the inside was of stone as well. There were shelves upon shelves of books, ranging from children’s books all the way to the adults only section. A small section of the library was dedicated to it's computers and researching area, while a whole other part was meant for the students who came in to study.
Zoe Hyundai sat at a small, rectangular table off to the backside of the library in the section for students. She was leaned over, her right arm curved around her paper with her head resting on it as her eyes shifted back and forth from her paper to her book, her left hand copying things down from the text quickly. It was her Forensic science class and, although she didn't need to yet, she was copying down notes for the upcoming chapter on analyzing fingerprints.
Across from Zoe was Rachel Trieu who was attempting to read through her book “From The Ground Up”. She was supposed to write an essay on the differences between the Rules and Regulations Canadian Airspace and the Rules and Regulations of American Airspace. She tried to focus on reading her book thoroughly but it was so boring, and it didn’t help that her eyes were wandering off of the pages, and onto the woman in front of her, who was working away quietly.
She stared at the angelic figure before her in awe. Her black hair, inherited from her Japanese ancestors was tucked behind her ear, and her sky blue eyes darted back and forth from the book to her papers. Rachel loved the color of her eyes that occasionally change to different tints and shades of blue. She often wondered if Zoe played any sports because her 5’5 figure looked athletically toned. She watched the mixed Caucasian woman quickly scribble.
Slowly, a gentle smile spread across Rachel’s face like when the sun gradually shines more and more upon the earth in the morning. Her mind was in a state of stand-by and all she could do was smile at Zoe, as her heart pounded softly against her chest.
Zoe looked up from her work for a moment, dropping her pencil onto her paper as she stretched out her fingers and then her arms and shoulders. She closed her eyes as she stretched, then reopened them slowly as she yawned and then looked over at the young woman in front of her. The girl had her jet-black hair pulled back in a ponytail, a few bangs hanging down in front of her face and a textbook sitting in front of her.
It took a little while, but Zoe finally noticed that Rachel’s chocolate brown eyes were looking at her and Zoe had a hard time not getting lost in their beauty. Zoe smiled at her warmly, as she began to put her notes into her textbook and then closed it. During that time, she only took her eyes off the two-inch taller girl once so that she made sure that she had put the notes in the book relatively straight. She pushed the book to the corner of the table, and then widened her smile slightly.
"I think it's time for a break," She said.
The Chaske Public Library was a large complex set in downtown Guadaloupe. It was surrounded by several small shops and food stores and beside it sat one of the three local DMVs, while across the street was the University of Guadaloupe. It was always crowded with some sort of people, whether it be students, kids, or people waiting for their place in line at the DMV. It was a building made of stone but plated in granite, and the inside was of stone as well. There were shelves upon shelves of books, ranging from children’s books all the way to the adults only section. A small section of the library was dedicated to it's computers and researching area, while a whole other part was meant for the students who came in to study.
Zoe Hyundai sat at a small, rectangular table off to the backside of the library in the section for students. She was leaned over, her right arm curved around her paper with her head resting on it as her eyes shifted back and forth from her paper to her book, her left hand copying things down from the text quickly. It was her Forensic science class and, although she didn't need to yet, she was copying down notes for the upcoming chapter on analyzing fingerprints.
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Across from Zoe was Rachel Trieu who was attempting to read through her book “From The Ground Up”. She was supposed to write an essay on the differences between the Rules and Regulations Canadian Airspace and the Rules and Regulations of American Airspace. She tried to focus on reading her book thoroughly but it was so boring, and it didn’t help that her eyes were wandering off of the pages, and onto the woman in front of her, who was working away quietly.
She stared at the angelic figure before her in awe. Her black hair, inherited from her Japanese ancestors was tucked behind her ear, and her sky blue eyes darted back and forth from the book to her papers. Rachel loved the color of her eyes that occasionally change to different tints and shades of blue. She often wondered if Zoe played any sports because her 5’5 figure looked athletically toned. She watched the mixed Caucasian woman quickly scribble.
Slowly, a gentle smile spread across Rachel’s face like when the sun gradually shines more and more upon the earth in the morning. Her mind was in a state of stand-by and all she could do was smile at Zoe, as her heart pounded softly against her chest.
Zoe looked up from her work for a moment, dropping her pencil onto her paper as she stretched out her fingers and then her arms and shoulders. She closed her eyes as she stretched, then reopened them slowly as she yawned and then looked over at the young woman in front of her. The girl had her jet-black hair pulled back in a ponytail, a few bangs hanging down in front of her face and a textbook sitting in front of her.
It took a little while, but Zoe finally noticed that Rachel’s chocolate brown eyes were looking at her and Zoe had a hard time not getting lost in their beauty. Zoe smiled at her warmly, as she began to put her notes into her textbook and then closed it. During that time, she only took her eyes off the two-inch taller girl once so that she made sure that she had put the notes in the book relatively straight. She pushed the book to the corner of the table, and then widened her smile slightly.
"I think it's time for a break," She said.
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