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 Posted: Wed Jun 20, 2007 3:33 pm
It's like a bloody green,
A meadow with horrific sheen.
The crime your envious eyes have seen.
The rage of bloody green.
Crimson blood on leaf and stalk,
Life shed upon the paths we walk.
Stalks flecked with red bend and sway,
As tainted souls who have betrayed.
It's like a bloody green,
A meadow with horrific sheen.
The crime your envious eyes have seen.
The rage of bloody green.
The blood rained down that grizzly day,
To paint the canvas of green May.
The gruesome art lying there is found,
With the life blood dripping down.
It's like a bloody green.
A meadow with horrific sheen.
The crime your envious eyes have seen.
The rage of bloody green.
The rain comes down in cleansing sheets,
Merging where blood and earth meets.
Your guilt fading from field and hand,
You pass away from this innocent land.
It's like a bloody green.
A meadow with horrific sheen.
The crime your envious eyes have seen
The fade of bloody green.
hope you guys like it. this was inspired by another poem a fellow gian posted. man her's is beautiful.
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 5:48 am
Wow. I really like this (I have a soft spot for poems then rhyme!) I like the repetition as well, and the fact that you used some poetic devices made this a very strong poem. I liked the vivid image of something that's a bloody green. Great job!
BUT!!! You haven't commented on other peoples work so I'll have to lock this until you comment on at least 3 writings.
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