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 Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 8:00 pm
Sorry guys. Same thing from Mirrior Prison crying Don't kill me, please. I shall post more soon. Promise.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 3:55 am
Yep, your really were depressed. It has that... sense of I'm lost in a void (at least I think it is) Confusing at times but that might be because it's abstract. *shudder.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 8:55 am
Yeah, I thought about reading it to my parents, but...*shrugs* they might
have thought I had major depression, or something. I was just in a phase
where I was totoally lost and sad. It sucked like hell. Thanks for the input!
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Posted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 8:19 am
I can see some places it needs to be fixed... but it's pretty good otherwise, here's some changes to it that I would make, but you don't have to if you don't want to. Changes are in bold.
To whom it concerns,
my life is a mess.
No one cares
For what I think best.
To whom it concerns,
I read and read.
Yet no one notes my
careful leads.
To whom it concerns,
death will come.
But no one will talk
about who and when.
To whom it concerns,
no one really cares.
And if they say they ******** it.
Because
No one
Really
Does.
It's really good, those were just the few changes that I thought would make it better. ^.^
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 9:54 am
Hee hee, yeah, I ment to put a "one" in there, but I sorta skipped over it.
sweatdrop But, thanks for your editing, you guys. I appreciate it. Hey, Broken,
how fast can you read about 80 pages? Roughly?
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 10:24 am
It's alright, I miss a lot of things most of the time, too... I just went back to check one of my poems yesterday and I spelled 'torture' 'torcher' lol.
Um... about an hour or so... I'm a slow reader, lol.
May I ask why?
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 8:24 am
My stories. Hey, do you have anymore of the first fanfic I read, with the other vampire who could turn into what he drew? I love that one! heart
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 9:14 am
Uh... have you read to the part where it's in Charlies' POV? If you have then, no. But if not, I do have that chapter for you to read, and there's only about two more left in the entire story, and I'm working on the next one. So yeah... have you read the chapter in Charlies' POV?
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 6:04 pm
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