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 Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 5:03 pm
Poem 1 IMPACtPadded rooms echo loudly While unmoving people race, With skewed looks like hunted beasts Crimson falls flow down the face. Saturated cotton weeps As life's liquid leaves it's stain, Frozen lakes strive to compare Through an apathetic rain. Bitter tastes within the mouth Final breaths escape a flood.
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Posted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 5:13 pm
Poem 2 The LeapThin streams of saltwater flowing Worn cotton soaks the stain straight through, Thoughts so small but always growing Falling before the boy's third step. With a snap the watch stops ticking Maroon skies painted on the dirt, His body's windows never shut A love-loathed heart becomes inert.
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Posted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 4:40 pm
Hey! Welcome to the guild, and I like your poetry. Makes you stop and think, and I like the way you don't outright say the point. Good Job!!
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Posted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 4:51 pm
Thank you! ^^ We learned how to do this in our Soph. Honors English class. You don't want to be outright with what you have to say, it not WHAT you say, it's the emotion that is given. As long as the reader can feel how you felt when you wrote it, it doesn't matter what it says.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 7:59 pm
J2G Thank you! ^^ We learned how to do this in our Soph. Honors English class. You don't want to be outright with what you have to say, it not WHAT you say, it's the emotion that is given. As long as the reader can feel how you felt when you wrote it, it doesn't matter what it says. lol, all good English classes teach that, but it's easier said than done. You do it quite nicely, I think.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 10:27 am
Marael J2G Thank you! ^^ We learned how to do this in our Soph. Honors English class. You don't want to be outright with what you have to say, it not WHAT you say, it's the emotion that is given. As long as the reader can feel how you felt when you wrote it, it doesn't matter what it says. lol, all good English classes teach that, but it's easier said than done. You do it quite nicely, I think. Why thank you very much! smile
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 9:52 am
Poem 3 Dead Man WalkingDown the halls my feet do tread, Smugly smile at the dead. With a snip I clip the thread, Suddenly I'm filled with dread. Never got my daily bread, Always sent off straight to bed.
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Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 10:25 am
Wow, Awsome Poem! biggrin
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Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 4:06 pm
Mystriotrix Wow, Awsome Poem! biggrin Why thank you! ^^
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Posted: Thu Jul 26, 2007 11:21 am
Excellent poems, they really paint a picture. Keep it up.
I am new to the guild so i am trying to get aquainted with everyone and how they write.
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Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 1:16 pm
I realy like your poetry. you make good use of imagery and you convey strong feeling.
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Posted: Mon Aug 20, 2007 10:40 pm
Thanks for the comments and sorry I haven't been on lately or have been posting much work...I'm just a bit busy with work so I can't get on much anymore. However, when the creativity strikes, I will post it ASAP.
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Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 10:32 pm
*steals mask*
<.< I no do nuttin
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Posted: Sat Mar 21, 2009 1:33 am
Hey, finally a chance to post (mainly because I just got fired today.....) but instead of a poem I made this for my AP Literature class's logo, tell me what you think! 
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Posted: Tue Mar 24, 2009 10:11 am
Your pic can not be seen, Please make shure its linked to your photobucket.
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