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Name: Serenity

Age: 20

Height:5'7

Weight:127

Occupation:
Works as a waitress but does art and painting on the side.

Eye Color: a blue-grey

Nationality:
She is asian, american indian, and hawaiian. She has thick dark hair and tanned skin. She is an american as her families moved there long before she was born.

History:
She was always into other cultures as a child and when she got into high school she studied much about history and religion.She visited as many countries as she could. Though her family didn't want her so far away the supported her education and wanted her to study and experience as much a possible. She saw many kinds of people and creatures on her trips which lead to her extreme interest in genetics. she then moved on to college,but don't let her age fool you even though she is only 20 she has graduated with a full degree and she studied much on human genetics as well as their animal counter parts. She studied how with slight gene alterations that someday much could be altered for the betterment of humans and animals. She studied abroad for a while in japan to conduct research on the subjects. Though she knew much and did well but has not taken her own education very far in this fields. Up-to-date she still likes travel and study. She enjoys sketching creatures and people to figure out the underneath complexity of D.N.A. Unfortunately shortly after finishing college her parents both fell ill her mother died and her dad followed a few months after, now she owns a small apartment in Ireland that she works out of waiting on bigger and better things to come along.

Appearance: She has very smooth skin, She has long,thick and dark hair and tanned skin. clean white nails and is thin but thick bodied.

Personality:
She is very patient and sometimes she is shy, but she also has a quick temper. She likes to get her way but she will negotiate with others. she is a gentle and kind person, and she loves to be around others. She often finds herself wanting to cheer others up when they are sad or have had a bad day. She is very active and exciting but likes th ob laid back and enjoy the simple and easy side of life.

( They are in order of how I prefer them, but I like all of these so any works .)
Wishes to be:
1. clydesdale (white with black spots on rear)
2.Okapi
3. Gerenuk
4.thompsons gazelle
5.deer
6.red kangaroo
7.dwarf crocodile
8. freshwater crocodile.


( They are in order of how I prefer them, but I like all of these so any works .)
(( I know there not the normal taurs but I really like the horse and okapi.))

Well then~ I can tell you've leaned towards the direction of Serenity being interested in the very sciences that lead into splicing, and that's good. However, it does seem like her character is a little unrealistic for the circumstances.

First of all, she is only 17. I'm always a little leery with young characters let onto the island, because unless they had a very specific situation, it wouldn't make sense that a child would be allowed to go to an unknown island by themselves, and aren't hunted down once they don't return. In Taurica Nesos, the less chances they have of being found again, the better. It helps to be a semi-independent individual, that isn't in the care of parents or in charge of anything huge. Along these same lines, it does not make sense that Serenity would have been able to do everything she did in her short lifetime. Traveling the world (without her parents, no less?), studying complex genetics, becoming an artist? It seems quite extreme, especially considering she's still in her parents' charge (were they not care for her, or were they just stupid? O_o). It just doesn't make sense that any parent that's willing to shell out THAT much money for their daughter to do all those things wouldn't actually care about them. (Plus, if they are just filthy rich... wouldn't they be able to send some crazy-huge search party after her once she's missing? We don't want that. ;; )

All in all, I think the age is the main problem - that, and the inconsistencies her age poses for what she's done with her life. I know the Kubri wouldn't want to kidnap some high school girl to conduct risky experiments on, unless there was NO chance of her ever being chased after. That, however, would call for a complete makeover of her family ties and history. You keep working on this, it's a good start! <3

Eeehh, the changes you made make her a bit more believable, at least. Still she's a bit cut-and dry; she could certainly be more dynamic in her past and what causes her personality. Nevertheless, she's at least complete enough to make a character out of that wouldn't totally cause the island to explode. XD

Approved, but don't be afraid to keep working on her! 3nodding If you ever want me to look over changes you've made, just put [char-approve] in your title again, and I'll get to it. heart