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 Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 5:52 pm
Name : Sinjo Drakes
Age: Twenty Five
height: 6'0
Weight: 100
Appearance: At first glance you wouldn't notice it. But under the lanky appearance was some muscle mass. Nothing major though, Sinjo could probably lift a hundred pounds, tops. He usually wore Dress shirts and stylish golf shirts that really weren't meant to be on the golf course.
He had Pants that were usually to tight and made of f vinyl, He even had a pair of leopard spot pants.
His hair was long brown and wild, Like that of a rock star from the eighties. It didn't need to be combed or things like that, it just kinda fell into place; But if left long enough it would start to become rather oily looking and frizz out of place. They Eyes on this Devil were Emerald and had this soft Feel when you looked at them directly. He tried to hide that though; Often failing at it.
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Reason for coming to the island : It started with the ticket he found. Bidding on online auctions, A not so proud obsession of his. It was the most ordinary day, Bidding online and checking his mail for packages that may have arrived. But today was a bit different, There was a pyramid shaped box, it had odd symbols on it. Nothing he could have remembered bidding on was shaped as it was. With the curiosity running through him like a child on Christmas, He rushed up to his apartment and carefully opened his box. After opening it he was confused, it was empty. He shook it and ripped apart before throwing it in the garbage. As he bent down to pick up a piece of cardboard he noticed it, the ticket on the floor. Was that what had come from the box. He read over it and figured out it was a ticket for a boat, due the very next day.
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You choose :3... Please run it buy my first though
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Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 2:04 pm
Woot woot. :3 I tend to do better when I nitpick these in sections, so here we go:
While he's complete enough, it seems like Sinjo is something of a "thrown together" character. I think I'd be more keen on him if he had a bit more explanation to his current state. For example, did he study anything in particular at his university? What do his bi-polar tendencies do to his social life, and what relationships has he had in the past? Did he have a goal in the past, that turned into odd-jobs? I'm sure there's a lot you can do to make him more dynamic, instead of just sticking to surface values. 3nodding
It also leads me to think that he's thrown together because of all the grammatical errors in this, such as random capitals where there shouldn't be, and spaces and periods in odd places. ;; Don't feel like you have to rush! Seriously, we're a long way off from actually holding a flat sale. Take your time, and perfect your character. <3
...What does "likes to wear plaid" mean? Are you talking lumberjack flannel shirts, punk rock plaid pants, kilts? So confused. XD
I do like how the ticket came in a pyramid box. XD SO something the Kubri would do, Adella's got a stupid sense of humor like that. I just might steal that and have all the tickets shipped in little Egyptian pyramid-boxes, to be confusing.
Soo, keep working on this. It's a good start. heart
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Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 2:17 pm
Ya, the capitols are just a bad habbit of mine
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