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 Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 5:29 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 6:04 pm
Yay! It's unlocked.
I like this until I got to the part when the character starts to shread her own blood. I hate that way of expressing one's pain. I find it highly pointless and pathetic. And because of my ways of thinking, my like for this just went down.
If I may ask where this is an extract from?
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The Bookwyrm Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 08, 2005 12:14 pm
It's definately a very personal sounding piece, and would have been very difficult to write. It expresses sentiments in such a way that it draws the reader in and makes them long for the same acceptance.
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Posted: Sat Nov 19, 2005 2:49 pm
This piece has a lot of emotion, which I like. It really draws the reader in. I also like how you said your character regretted when she was a cutter. I don't like cutting and many cutters do realize the errors of their ways later in life which gave this piece a realistic feel. Besides a couple of errors (like 'thin' instead of 'think' in paragraph 3) I thought this piece was very good. Keep up the good work!
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