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 Posted: Thu Jul 26, 2007 10:58 am
I think everyone should try to let their creative side just burst out and cover the world with it but alas we can not so i think we should just cover our own piece of the world with art and share it to others who want to do the same. I created a poetry place just for poetry anyone can post here with there poetry and can even change old rymes like rose are red, violets are blue sugar is sweet and so are you to some thing like roses are red violets are blue i dont kow what to say how about you? Be creative and Zae's rules aplie here too i will start it with a poem of mine and i want it to be criticed!
Light to darkness
beauty will fade
light will fall
horror will rain
darkness will come
lose yourself in shadows
never again see light
broken deep inside
prisoner of your emotions
torn between love and hate
reaching out when no one is there
see happiness but not in you
see kindness but not to you
all because he broke your heart
he died on that night
taking your heart with him
to where you will never know
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Posted: Wed Nov 07, 2007 7:11 pm
yeah, it was very good. You should probably check your spelling of certain things, and perhaps look for words that present a less literal meaning, so that everyone can relate in some way to what it is you are trying to express. other than that I can't really see anything wrong; good job!
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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2008 12:31 pm
Wind
feel the wind,
powerful and bright,
feel the wind,
feel its might,
feel it as it blow through your hair,
blowing it here and there,
feel as it weaves through the trees,
as it offset the paths of the bees
feel the wind,
powerful and bright,
feel the wind
I just said that off the top of my head........
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