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The Darkness The darkness of my mind Takes over me And causes the world pain While I laught evily. Darkness fills my heart And has eaten away at my soul You can't stop the darkness It will still grow And take over our unsuspedcting world. The world will fill with darkness As it really should be Poeple shouldn't need the light to find their way For light has been destroyed And the darkness will be here to stay.

Posted by: Rioshu1505 Sat Oct 01, 2005 @ 03:46am

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Commented on: Sat Oct 01, 2005 @ 07:17pm


	hmm wasn't really interesting, I suggest maybe rhyming some stuff even though its rather old fashioned. But it makes me more interesting and memorable.

Commented on: Sat Oct 01, 2005 @ 07:20pm

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Commented on: Sat Oct 01, 2005 @ 07:21pm


	I think your poem is good,but you don't seem like a dark person to me. Maybe confused or lost, but not dark,but what do I know I've never even met you before. All in all, it's a great poem. wink

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