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Dark Hearts These are short storys that i want to get out and have people read they may not be good, but you can comment on it. thaxs


Kasumi_Hitomi
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Dark Hearts
Big City (Story #1)

"Move Sora..." the boys voice told me harsly. People walked up and down the
sidewalk like there was something big goin' on. Were are we goin'.
"Hey kid, do i know you?!?" i yelled to the kid up ahead. he stoped walked
back to me. He put me head under his arm.
"You dodn't even know youre own borther name, i'm hurt, Riku... you a**" he
seemed like a borther but i didnt even know who i was. Was it true? "Sora your acttin'
funny, you ok" he asked as if he cared.
"Riku do you know a girl named K...EH?!?" i sounded so stupid asking him that.
"Ya, lots, Sora did you lose your heart?!?" he asked shakein' me rapidly. Can
that happen, someone lose their heart, dont you die." you know they say if you lose
your heart that you lose your self. You walk around doin ... nothin'" he laughed" You
cant lose your heart if you did you would be new, not the same as you were before, but
your the same always lost. Come on now were gon to be late for the show."
Ever scine that dream i cant remeber anything did i lose my heart, no , Riku
said i didnt. i looked up at Riku, he was forzen, not just him every one. I looked
around fanticly, i looked at my feet last, they were bein' ingulfed by the darkness
i screamed for help no-one moved. But before i was lost to the darkness i saw him.
He had a wing, a white wing and a black wing, i closed my eyes hopein' it was a
dream again.
"Youre the only one, the key lays in you heart, help me Sora" the girls voice
again, it must be a dream.





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Jozborn
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comment Commented on: Mon Mar 27, 2006 @ 11:27pm
good, but do a spell-check on it. And try not to cut off the lines so much. It's a bit hard to read. Other than that, good job blaugh


comment Commented on: Tue Mar 28, 2006 @ 04:59pm
I like it so far. the spelling could be better though. But the story is great.



Kaistine
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