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 Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 4:49 pm
i have a short story series going. dramaartwriting knows what im talking about its called the prevailing series. now i have been told that my writing style is interesting and my stentance structure is grate but you may notice from this post alone my typing and spelling isnt of the gratest (i needs an edditor ><) fortunatly there is spell and grammar check built into my word processor but if i miss something here or there please dont freak out on me im trying really!
thanks for listening to my rambling on to the prevailing series ^^
the first few are rather short
umm well because i would rather not fish between all of my posts i have made a seperate thread for comments on my stories in the Critiques section and here is the url: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=2382836
so you don't have to go fishing for it if you want to comment, if you dont want to comment here and instead would like to talk to me directly about my work feel free to im me at one of my three messanger systemsThe wind blew through her dark free flowing hair. The mountain air so fresh, so clean. The images of the battle that just ended went through her mind. A smile creased her stern heartbroken face. A sigh of relief escaped her lips as she began to hum the song her mother once hummed to her. She sheathed her blood stained sword and picked up her dagger from the dirt. She walked down towards the valley still humming. Almost dancing down the mountain, the thrill of the battle continued to flare in her heart. She had finally done it. She killed him. She prevailed over her brother. Her long despised enemy now lay dead atop the mountain. Upon reaching the valley she untied her waiting war dog and mounted herself in the saddle. She then rode off with the same twisted smile.
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 4:54 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 5:11 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 5:17 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 5:33 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 5:34 pm
a breif bacground on cora:
cora started out as my d&d carrie and she evolved from there... there is kinda two versions of her now... the fifth level halfing cleric of the land of the scotish orcs and bob her fourth level war dog that's fur was died bright green by a party member (the same one who ran around with the stick of hurting a broken fairy wand in real life) then there is the cora of text based rping... she is alot more tough and her past is way more twisted... ^^ and thats the one i write about some time ill have to write about why the only thing she fears as a rule is dragons ^^
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Posted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 8:00 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 6:51 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 6:38 pm
I'm sorry but I currently don't feel like reading that much.
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Posted: Sun Mar 26, 2006 2:42 pm
Knight of the Dance I'm sorry but I currently don't feel like reading that much. lmao, thats all good... each post is a differnt story so if you feel like reading them in the future lemme know what you think
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 6:57 pm
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Posted: Wed Apr 05, 2006 7:44 am
Okay i finaly started to read these. It seems like you based it off of D&D or another rpg. I only got through the first three. I have problems with paying attention when I read anything I get easily sidtracked in my own thoughts but this held my attention very well I assume you intend to continue with this series, yes. I'm sure if you organized these it would turn more into a novel. Its okay if its short now. As long as you don't loose interest It shall continue to grow.
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Posted: Wed Apr 05, 2006 2:33 pm
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Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 1:51 pm
well my computer is temporarally up in flames... (if it doesnt get its rear in gear it will litterally be up in flames of course after i smash the boorish hardrive with a hammer and butterknife...) and the first chapter once i get it back if i get it back which i should but with computers you never know... will go to my self proclaimed edditor and good friend td or total darkness as she is known on gaia... yeay *does happy dance*
but that is only if i can get it back from the depths of the infirno that is my computers inability to function being that it was pieced together off the internet for $400 in a months time...
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